Lamentations

Spring rises out of hibernation,

Breezing through the budding life,

And though the world now richly shines

To stifle Winter’s strife,

Without the hearth to warm the heart,

Without the light to cheer the soul,

The cold had rendered chipped and chafed

A life once bright, once whole;

Alone in mournful melancholy,

Wishing time would timely mend

The ties of care, the links of love,

The bonds 'twixt those called friend.

I wander through the sunlit streets,

A windswept wisp the world forgot-

Spring rises with a lively spring,

Though I in turn spring not.

-EDP

Reviews

[Chris Shaw]

Nicely written, strong imagery and the loneliness comes through to the reader.

Well done

Chris

[emipoemi]

Thank you! Glad you enjoyed it

[EdgarAllanPoet]

As the world dies around us, only then do we realize it is by our hands. Great poem, huge impact. Thanks for sharing.

[emipoemi]

Thanks for reading. Glad you enjoyed it.

[Ranger Kessel]

You have a wonderful form which also allows for conveyance of message. I wish you could give me some lessons. I appreciate this write. It inspires me to do something like this myself. I am glad I stopped by for a read. Thank you

[emipoemi]

No, thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed this.
As for lessons...... to tell you the truth, poetry is very spiritual. It cannot be taught one on one, but rather if you believe in the spirit of the poem, and the Muse that encompasses you as a poet, you will see how easy it can be. But you have to believe. You have to trust in the Muse/poem, and allow it to flow through you; guide you; speak to you. If you control it, it will leave you (and you will fall into Writer's Block). Never control. Allow it to flow, and it will help you create wonders like the poem you just read. Hope that helps.

[Papaya]

The sorrow and perhaps regret in this is truly felt.
Some marvellous lines throughout lend to slow decline in hope and optimism.
Perhaps despair.
The depths of despair as Anne Shirley liked to say...

[emipoemi]

Thank you! This really came from the heart. Glad you enjoyed it.

[Emma]

Gentle and calm yet wholly tragic as I realised that the slow flowing rhythm resembled that of a soul that had given up, was labouring in it's movements. So much about this poem is lovely but what stands out to me is your effortless and effective use of alliteration throughout.
Oh and I really like the split in halve stanzas
A life once bright, once whole
and
The ties of care, the links of love
I just really like the elaborating images and I think it reads very nice like that, something I will remember as often I opt for the shorter lines

[emipoemi]

Bravo on the interpretation! Also enjoyed reading your thoughts and favourite lines (they're some of my faves of the poem too). Glad you enjoyed this! Thanks for reading.

[Rebecca Leigh]

Beautifully written.. i love the imagery you convey.

[emipoemi]

So glad you did! Thanks for reading.

[sette]

full of metaphors shows the creativity and uniqueness of the writing.

[emipoemi]

Indeed it does :) Thanks for reading. Glad you enjoyed it.

[sette]

you are welcome

[CM-Stars]

What a beautiful poem. Much like Hannah, the last stanza is my favorite, which based on your reply to her, you aren't surprised! :)

"A windswept wisp the world forgot-"

That may be the most beautiful, sad line I've read on here and my favorite. I was so moved by it.

This is poetry.

Hope your today is better than your yesterdays

[emipoemi]

This comment definitely bettered my today :) Thank you so much! I've always said that the sad write the strongest....this was one of my lonely days and I felt like venting. Reading everyone's comments on my work never fails to put a smile on my face. Glad you enjoyed it.

[H L Rose]

I love the narrative.

In the first paragraph, the description of the coming of spring is beautiful. I love the line "breezing through the budding life".

I really enjoy the sound of the second paragraph especially "without the hearth to warm the heart".

The third paragraph has a sad but beautiful sentiment. "Wishing time would timely mend" is my favorite line in this paragraph. It makes me think of a longing for the cliche "time will heal" to be true.

I like the line "A windswept wisp the world forgot-" in the fourth paragraph. I like the sound of it, and I also like imagery.

The last line was probably my favorite in the whole poem. "Though I in turn spring not." It drives the whole point home very well.

I thoroughly enjoyed this poem. The sentiment comes through beautifully.

[emipoemi]

Thank you so much! It was written very much from the heart, and I always try to end on a climactic zenith (so you liking the last line out of all is no surprise). Glad you enjoyed it.

[H L Rose]

Of course!