Friendships

So many suns have shimmered
Across the sweeping sky;
So many moons have glimmered
With many stars nearby;
So many happy moments
Have dissolved into the past.
And I’m sorry - sorry - sorry!
I blind was to the story
Of friendships that don’t last.
 
By the lustre of the sunrise
They come, frisky as a faun,
Yet against the gloomy sunset
They in a blink are gone.
And I’m hurled into the doldrums
With my fervour fading fast.
And I’m sorry - sorry - sorry!
My days are dark and hoary
From friendships that don’t last.
 
My dreams were high and mighty!
My eyes were on the prize!
I sided with my demon
Despite my angel’s cries.
Now I wade into the future,
Much afflicted, much aghast.
And I’m sorry - sorry - sorry!
I wallow in false glory
From friendships that don’t last.
 
I can still perceive your features,
Still can call you all by name.
I but lacked the understanding
Of how to play the game.
O I pray my plea be heeded;
That a lifeline soon be cast.
For I’m sorry - sorry - sorry!
Purge me from purgatory
With friendships that would last.

-EDP

Reviews

[Angeliki Largatzis]

This is simply amazing, and very true.

It is tough to find friendships that last, as it is equally satisfying when you do.

Lovely read.

[emipoemi]

I've had some luck in finding lasting ones now....but I wish I've had the luck of still being friends with people I knew years ago (my longest direct friendship – direct being the operative word; actually in person and hanging out - has lasted merely two years). Thanks for reading. Glad you enjoyed it.

(it holds a sweet spot in my recently (self)published debut collection of poems)

[Chris Shaw]

True friends are like gold dust and they are hard to find. I have many, many aquaintances but the number of true friends I have, who I could turn to if I was in real trouble I can count on one hand. They are people I have known for decades. Your poem is beautifully composed emipoemi. Rhymes nicely and the repetition enhances the poem. Friendships have to be worked at, earned. With the busy lives we lead, we don't always have the time to invest in so much effort.

Chris

[emipoemi]

Then in most cases, we gotta try harder, no? Thanks for reading. Glad you enjoyed it.

[Chris Shaw]

You are so right, and yes I did enjoy your lovely lines.

Chris

[Carolynn]

I am very guarded about who I allow in as a true and faithful friend but I have a had a few of these as well. Best to stay guarded and only allow the gems access to the fullness of your true friendship - I really appreciate the different styles you use in your poetry. I love doing the same thing with my poems :)

[emipoemi]

being eclectic in your art shows you have range and that you're not afraid of other forms. I let my poetry do what it wants. I'm a firm believer that the poet is not writing the poems, but rather the muse is guiding them to write it. Glad you enjoyed this poem, though, I too try to stay guarded....it's more those I let in suddenly don't want to stay, and I can never understand the reason. Thanks for reading.

[Amanda Trerotola]

Friendships that are fad are so rough. That is like 99% of my friendships. Sometimes, life just happens and true colors show.

[emipoemi]

It's true evidence that life is often cruel. 99% of my friendships ended with life happening. This poem was an outlet for me to vent my feelings. Thanks for reading!

[Mari' Emeraude]

Yes,fading friendships are sad and it's hard to accept that they are just another fleeting moment in our lives

[emipoemi]

Indeed. Thanks for reading. Glad you enjoyed it.

[Samuel Dickens]

You've made me think about friendships and why some last and some don't. The best I can come up with is this: Some friendships aren't based on much, and require some amount of effort to maintain them. Others come natural and need no work at all in order to last. The latter is more apt to last, methinks. There's surely more to it than that, but that's my two cents.

[emipoemi]

And your two cents have been noted. Thank you! Glad you enjoyed it (and were able to contemplate on it a bit).

[Zoya]

Wow...completely relatable this one. Friendships don't just materialise outta nowhere. You gotta nurture them, put in your love and everything. A little less effort by any of the two- before you know it the friendship would slowly and gradually start dying.
The first two stanzas were my favourite! Well done!

[emipoemi]

Thank you so much! Glad you enjoyed it.

[Zoya]

No worries

[ayesha cullen]

I loved it. Smart rhymes, good choice of words and power-packed emotion. Looking forward to more of your work.

[emipoemi]

Thank you! Glad you enjoyed it!

[Govind singh]

Wow!!such an amazing piece.. especially the last para was mind-blowing:)

[emipoemi]

Thank you!

[Govind singh]

Ur wlcm.......

[H L Rose]

The last stanza is my favorite, but I like the imagery in the first one a lot. I really like how you depicted the passing of time with the first four lines.

“I blind was to the story/ of friendships that don’t last”

I like how you seem to establish a nievity towards the concept of lost friends in the beginning(or that may be just my personal interpretation).

I liked the equation of happiness to sunrise and “gloomy” to the sunset in the second stanza. It’s a well depicted image and I think it’s a good way to get your point across. I also like the alliteration of

“With my fervour fading fast”

I thought that line sounded nice.

I love the flow and rhymes in stanza three and thought the lines,

“I sided with my demon/ despite my angel’s cries”

were intriguing and well put.

The last stanza really hits home. It tells such a heartfelt message very well.

“Still can call you all by name!”

Definitely relatable.

“I but lacked the understanding/
Of how to play the game.”

^^^ Probably one of my favorite sentiments in the poem.

I like the repetition of “sorry - sorry - sorry!” as well. It really helps to get the poem’s passion across.

The flow of the second to last line in each stanza also caught my eye. Not sure why. I just thought they sounded nice.

Really enjoyed this one!

[emipoemi]

Thank you so much! Yeah, this was all based on experience (so it really came from the heart). Glad you enjoyed it!