Feminine

How sweet a sound is feminine,

How softly female skips

Along the ripples of the tongue

And through the supple lips.

 

A simple sigh of feminine,

Or female, woman, girl,

Exhales a warm and mystic charm

That spurs the soul to whirl.

 

Whilst masculine is coarse as stone,

And decked in monochrome.

He squarely stands and keeps his march

Set to a metronome.

 

Armed simply with a copper heart,

He tingles skin and bone,

And needs the iron of feminine

To tint and tame his tone.

 

Yet ev’ry face of feminine

Was made from molds of man,

As Eve from Adam was conceived

To spark God’s holy plan.

 

Thus feminine is masculine

Twice firm, twice fit, twice whole,

For underneath the sweet façade

Lies heart, lies spleen, lies soul.

-EDP

Author's Note

Happy International Women's Day!

Reviews

[Emma]

Firstly absolutely love the message here, and an incredible new way to originate the empowerment point, as I had never considered how even the sound assigned to women is defining the kind of character they should become.
Secondly, the rhyming in this is brilliant through the male stanzas, new and purposeful.
Thirdly, your consonance and use of the harsher 't's for men and 'f's and 'p's for women is brilliant and something which I definitely want to start incorporating into my poetry as I think when spoken it is just as rhythmic and emphatic as rhyming.
Only praise for this poem

[emipoemi]

Thank you so much! It's highly advisable to think about what you want to say in the poem, and let the poem "figure it out itself". It's a far more rewarding experience if you give yourself to the craft rather than try to craft yourself. Glad you enjoyed it.

[Emma]

Yes I always find that it is often second nature to encorporate these things into your writing and only an outside view appreciates all the complexities that just...happened

[Saoirse K.]

exceptional command of rhyme and metre in this piece
and a wonderful ode to femininity
a fantastic write

[emipoemi]

So glad you enjoyed it. It's my contribution to the gender equality cause. And it's after all women's month now - :) Thanks for reading.

[Carolynn]

I love the way you weaved this gem through a separate interpretation of both male and female then ending with both being in and of each other - as in God's holy plan. Each drawing strength from the other to create perfect balance....the way it was intended.

[emipoemi]

Indeed! So glad you enjoyed it! (it makes an appearance in the book). Thanks for reading.

[Carolynn]

Oh I was hoping it would - I received it today so will look forward to reading it again :)

[Anise]

What a lovely tribute to woman for women's day.
Beautiful poem!

[emipoemi]

Thank you. Glad you enjoyed it.

[Anise]

You are welcome!

[closed]

Your words present the celebration of complimentary and beautiful things.

[emipoemi]

Why, thank you! I simply let the Muse guide me ;) Glad you enjoyed it!

[closed]

I hear you man and you are very welcome :)

[❀ Gabriela ..]

Just lovely!! I enjoyed your contrast between the sweet softness of femininity, and the sturdy, rigid strength of masculinity. Men and women were created to be complimentary to each other- I like how you highlighted this, and at the end paid tribute to the hidden, quiet strength and taming nature of femininity. Excellent piece!

[emipoemi]

That was the intention! Glad you enjoyed it! Thanks for reading.

[McEltic]

Filled with pondering thought and found no myths to point a finger at... Enjoyed this piece

[emipoemi]

Glad you did. Thanks for reading.

[SleeplessVolcano]

What a joy to read! I liked the Biblical undertones too. "And needs the iron of feminine", being a nine-syllable line, however, clashes with your 8686 rhyme scheme......maybe the word "feminine" could be replaced with a two syllable option, like "her soul".....which could fit perfectly....

Brilliant poetry :)

[emipoemi]

I see what you mean, and I will look more into that, but for now, I like the sound of the little jump in the line. "Iron" is one of those words that can flow into one syllable in a way, and being that it's in the second down beat, there can be a little skip and a jump to the second half of the line. Try it out, see if you can hear it. There's a swoop that happens with "iron" that bridges the line together. Glad you enjoyed it, though! Thanks for reading.

[Relic]

One word.............great!

[emipoemi]

Thank you!

[Whitelillies]

Not in a position to say much but -"Thus feminine is masculine
Twice firm, twice fit, twice whole,
For underneath the sweet façade
Lies heart, lies spleen, lies soul."
Love the rhymes here (especially this part) and of the entire poem. I am so glad i read this !

[emipoemi]

Thank you so much! Glad you did, too!

[B. Maaitah]

This is splendid...
it's sweet, powerful, and ethereal just as every woman is!
love the rhyme and the flow.. very musical :)

[emipoemi]

Thank you! Glad you enjoyed it.