Winter

 

Winter! Winter!

Sending shivers through my skin!

Winter! Winter!

With the wind I cannot win!

 

Winter! Winter!

Very blurry, bleak, and bare!

Winter! Winter!

 Ev’ry breath wafts through the air!

 

(O) Winter! Winter!

Writhing in unease untold!

Winter! Winter!

Wrapped in blankets sevenfold!

(hhh-ha! hhh-ha!)

God d****t it’s so cold-

God is merciful!

Keep in mind

God is merciful!

He is kind!

He will stop the wind of Winter

Sending shivers through my skin,

But it’s such a piercing splinter,

With the wind I cannot win!

 

hhh-ha! hhh-ha!

hhh-ha-a-hh-ha-a-ha!

hhh-ha! hhh-ha!

hhh-ha-a-hh-ha-a-ha!

 

Winter! Winter!

Chatter, splutter, whine, and wail!

Winter! Winter!

Achy, worn, and deathly pale!

 

(hhh-ha!)

 

Winter! Winter!

So inane to be outside!

Winter! Winter!

Nowhere anyone can hide!

 

(O) Winter! Winter!

 Writhing in unease untold!

Winter! Winter!

Wrapped in blankets sevenfold!

(hhh-ha! hhh-ha!)

God d****t it’s so cold-

God is merciful!

Keep in mind

God is merciful!

He is kind,

He will stop the wind of Winter

Sending shivers through my skin!

But it’s such a piercing splinter,

With the wind I cannot win!

 

hhh-ha! hhh-ha!

hhh-ha-a-hh-ha-a-ha!

hhh-ha! hhh-ha!

hhh-ha-a-hh-ha-a-ha!

 

Winter!

With the wind I cannot win!

-EDP

Reviews

[Bare trees]

This puts winter into perspective in a way that can't be mistakin. Your tone provides the misery one must go through in such a circumstance. Toooo Coooold. ha Nice one.

[emipoemi]

Thanks. Glad you enjoyed it. If you'd like to hear what it actually sounds like, I put the link to the virgin performance (in April 2016) in some of my responses to others' comments below. Thanks for stopping by.

[Rania M]

It's brrrrrrrrr cold there and I can feel it till here. You're making me think up my own expressions here. Perhaps that's what poetry is all about...?

[emipoemi]

It's definitely a perk but it's not what it's all about. Thanks for reading. Glad you enjoyed it.

[ellen]

I love the format of this poem! Also, you have mastered punctuations in this poem. Especially, the parentheticals and exclamation points. It all comes together in a really rhythmic and pretty poem! Good job!

[emipoemi]

Thank you so much! If you're interested:
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=PBANAbgqDbg&t=6s
read moreThank you so much! If you're interested:
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=PBANAbgqDbg&t=6s
This is the virgin performance of the poem/song. Glad you enjoyed reading it! It was surely fun to write!

[emipoemi]

.....apparently, it doesn't work when you share links....but that link is to the virgin performance of the piece, if you wanna hear how it sounds.

Glad you enjoyed reading it! It was surely fun to write.

[ellen]

Cool! I'll check it out!

[Relic]

LOL. This was rewarding to read and laugh at. hhh-ha! hhh-ha! :)

[emipoemi]

Thank you so much! Glad you enjoyed it. The "hhh-ha"'s were not laughter, just to be clear, (although they may seem so), they're moaning shivers.

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=PBANAbgqDbg&t=4s

Copy and paste that onto your browser, and you'll be able to hear what it's supposed to sound like (it's the virgin performance of that poem).

[Relic]

haha, nice! I could never do that in front of an audience. Great job. :)

[emipoemi]

Thank you! It has become a crowd pleaser over the years. I bring it out every Winter for the entertainment of the public.

[Relic]

I can see you enjoy doing it too. haha

[BlackPrince]

This is such a unique masterpiece! I has a musicality and rhythm and refrain that is just infectious. It's written with laughter, intelligence and love.

This is a very good poem!!

WELL DONE!!!

[emipoemi]

Thank you! Yeah, this is actually a crowd pleaser, and I bring it out every Winter (it's around 4 years old now), and it always gets a good response. Glad you enjoyed it.

[BlackPrince]

I see you're saying this is a crowd pleaser. So Do you actually recite your poems in public venues?
And where?

[emipoemi]

I do indeed. On occasion here in Toronto. You can fin the virgin recital of this exact poem here: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=PBANAbgqDbg

[Annette Pisano-Higley]

Haaaaaaaa! Great! “God d****t it’s so cold- God is merciful...”yes- BUT- give a poor cold guy a break please! Beautifully written in form, flow, cadence rhyme. Perfect musicality through clenched teeth! Great parody-absolutely love it! :):):)

[emipoemi]

So glad you did! Thanks for reading! It was definitely fun to write.