The Wind and the Sun (part 2)

Enraged the Sun had won their test

To prove the stronger of the two,

The Wind sent chaos through the streets

With ev’ry gust it blew.

 

It toppled benches, stalls, and signs,

Sent wads of garbage through the air;

Caused ev’rything and ev’ryone

To scatter ev’rywhere.

 

And, sniggering, pleased with itself,

It swiveled to address the Sun:

“You may be who can make them strip,

But I can make them run!”

 

The Sun, then, gave its all to shine

Much brighter than it had before,

But found it could not stop the Wind,

And set things right once more.

-EDP

Reviews

[emily.c.]

This is beautiful and sad, especially with recent crazy weather and world happenings. The rhyme and rhythm is lovely. It reads like a fable, and I was waiting for the sun to win the whole time. Delicately powerful just like a children's story.

[emipoemi]

Thank you. As you can see by the "Part 2" this is a continuation of one of Aesop's fables. It is intended to be read after having read the Aesop one. But glad you enjoyed it. (and yeah....good call about the weather down south....that kind of makes this a bit sad.....)

[emily.c.]

I have read the Aesop fable and enjoyed this one just as much. Very clever.

[DiskartetHaraya]

Hi. Finding this take on a fable interesting.

I like how the Sun's and the Wind's characters remain the same, but more developed. In the original, the Sun easily became the winner and, in a way, like a "protagonist". Here, the Sun seems less perfect (in a good way) since it seems that the Wind is always causing it trouble.

For its part, the wind became the rather silly, immature figure in the original. But here, its natural brutality redeems it.

Good read.

[emipoemi]

A grand interpretation! Thank you. Glad you enjoyed it.

[Norbanus]

The fears and doubt, and loss of clout
cause Helios to wonder.
With all his dreadful bright delights
Anemoi might make him blunder

He strikes a blow, and we all know,
brute-force is not the answer.
Stab the light, both left and right
but wind is quite a dancer.

Perchance again it's not the spin
To ward off Sol's perfection
Could be the Greeks sat up for weeks
To ponder just that question.

Like Aesop too, you gave a chew
at this perplexing riddle
I have to say yours oughta play
Quite well on fiction's fiddle

[emipoemi]

If this is the way you review the work on here, I first of all have to say I envy you, for that's skill (I've done my fair share of that in the past, but I'm not as skilled in it)....and second of all, it makes me all the more excited for the next one.

[Norbanus]

I'm glad you tolerated my babbling bit of fun, emipoemi. Your skills are obvious to the most casual observer. I doubt that I'll find opportunities to discover errors in you writing, as you have in mine.
Thanks for your suggestions. They are much appreciated.

[barleygirl]

This is brilliantly conceived, & executed with great imagination & excellent details. I can feel the competitive spirit shining thru. I love the way this can be an allegory for two forces in life, whatever they may be, such as work & home life competing for one's time, etc. Love the rhyme & rhythm, perfectly done (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[emipoemi]

Thank you so much! Frankly, this wasn't intended to have an implicit allegory.....just a whimsical continuation of the well-known fable. But every interpretation is as good as the next. Glad you enjoyed it.

[Great Aunt Astri]

A very good 'take' on this well known fable. No doubt the Sun and the Wind will continue to devise ways to prove their superiority! You have written the poem beautifully. It was a pleasure to read.

[emipoemi]

Thank you. Glad you enjoyed it.

[Great Aunt Astri]

You are welcome.

[Srchaud]

I am sure there is a deeper meaning, but on the surface I enjoyed it for what it was. A fun battle between sun and wind.
A neat thought having the sun and wind trying to prove who is better.
It is interesting that the wind changed the world with desruction while the sun a being considered order and warmth could do little to stop it.
Maybe that is the deeper meaning, sometimes to make change you have to at first create chaos.

[emipoemi]

there's no deeper meaning per se....read the Aesop fable of the same name, and you'll understand this more. (for notice there's "part 2" added to the title of this whimsical little poem).

[Srchaud]

either I am missing something or I am stupid( I am assuming the latter) I am not seeing an Aesop fable or wind and sun part 1 in your works.

[Srchaud]

Could you send it as a read request?

[emipoemi]

the Aesop fable you'll have to Google. Look up The Wind and the Sun by Aesop on Google, and it should pop up. It's a very well known fable.

[Srchaud]

Oh you mean the actually fable. Thanks for clarifying I thought you meant something you wrote with that title.

[emipoemi]

no. The "part 2" in my title is supposed to partly be funny but mainly so readers would understand that it's actually a whimsical continuation of that fable.