The Warrior

Beware the warrior,

 

She is mad,

She is precise,

She is a tiger,

And she will have no mercy.

 

Her knife shines like ice,

Her hair dark like night,

Her feet fall softly,

Her hands fall hard.

 

In the wind she flows,

Dancing with the leaves,

The light dappling on her skin,

She fools you.

 

Author's Note

I got this published! I'm really happy!

Reviews

[Taylor H.]

I normally dont review poems since I find it hard to say anything other than I liked it lol. I remember reading this poem, which is hard for me. I did enjoy this. The visuals are awesome and you're right the last stanza is better than it was before. I liked and didnt like how it ended with Beware the warrior. I think the first one was good but the second I feel took the rhythm off a bit. Its up to your whether you keep it :) Poems are very personal and I hate telling people to change them. I did enjoy this and I think you are a great writer.

[Taylor H.]

Ok :) I dont want you thinking I didnt like it. I do. Its a very visually inspiring poem :)

[emilythestrange]

Thanks :D

[emilythestrange]

I did change Beware the warrior in the end. I entered it in a contest and I wanted to make it as good as possible. Thank you for telling me to change it.

[Matty Bosox]

Emily you really didn't have to fix it!!! Its still amazing either way!! Not only do I think this is the greatest poem you hae written....Right now I think its one of the greatest poems in the WORLD!!! I think girls with power are so sexy...I too was a huge Buffy fan because Sarah Michelle is such a gorgeous girl but she kicked a*s as well...Even better though.....FAITH!!! Eliza Dushku!!! Oh excellent stuff!! Faith is this poem...this poem is Faith LoL

[ewest1220]

Very interesting! I really do enjoy this thank you for sharing this work!

[Matty Bosox]

WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW and WOW again!!!!! Emily I can't believe this is your writing!!! Not saying your usuall writing is bad of course but this is sooo polished, so perfectly worded, your description of the warrior is exactly how I would describe my GAP girls....You took the rug and pulled it right out from underneath me with this....I was definitly floored by your poem Emily!!!! Keep it up

[emilythestrange]

Thank you, but it I still have a problem with it. The last stanza is just not right....I need to work on it

[Matty Bosox]

Yeah, I noticed that....But I'll tell you, with how great the rest of it is, the last part kinda gets lost in the perfection...You really, truly, and honestly shocked me with how amazing this turned out to be Emily...Especially, like I said, first off with how young you are, the other things you write are just weird and strange "Which is what I love about you" and why this poem shocked me the way it did..

[emilythestrange]

Thanks

[Baby Ricochet]

Great poem. When I was in the corps we called female Marines BAMS. You're a pre teen so I can't say what that stood for but it wasn't very nice. Us male Marines ripped on them somthing terrible so they had to prove themselves to us and they did. BAMS did the corps proud.

[emilythestrange]

I'm guessing it means B****** something! Thanks for the review, even though it has nothing to do with my poem :)

[Owlgirl]

Wow! Great job! Very well writen and nice imagery :) I can really get the feel of The Warrior from your poem, awesome writing!

[emilythestrange]

Thank you!

[Owlgirl]

Your welcome, it was great! Thank you for the awesome request! :)

[Tamia123]

I love reading about fierce females :) Loved this piece! Good Job! Have you ever heard of the Greek tragedy Medea? This poem could be a tribute to it :)

[Tina Kline]

I like this. Nicely written and enjoyable tale in your poem.

[Matty Bosox]

I loved your review of my project just for the fact that you said you loved it....I am very extremly hard on myself when it comes to my writing....But this poem, although very simple in context and words is excellent especially for my genre...I of course have alot of characters in my stories and projects that are based on strong women....I think you should look at my contest, you would probably do great...Thank you for the review btw

[Persephone Blum]

I really love this poem!! I think that if you had cut out the third and fourth lines out of the final verse, it would have flowed better, but in general it's extremely well written! Great job!