Alison Wonderland- Part Six

( Alison is hiding behind a corner of a wall. She decides that she will run down the hallway and out the door)

( Alison starts running)

White Queen's Knight- " Hey! Wait! "

( Alison turns around)

Alison- " Yees? "

WQK- " Where are you going? Who are you? "

( Alison holds her head up high)

Alison- " I am Alison Icon Wonderland, and I am the heir to all of Wonderland. I am leaving this castle because if I don't the whole place will fall in on top of me! "

WQK- " No.... No one who lives under the Red Queen is not allowed to leave"

Alison- " Well, I'm leaving. Goodbye"

( Alison starts walking down the hallway that she was running through)

WQK- " Wait! "

( Alison stops, and turns around, hand on her hip)

Alison- " What? "

WQK- " The Red Queen's Knights are out there... You have to go this way" ( He says it reluctantly)

( Alison follows the young knight, and as they leave the building, the Red Queen's Knights come in... The building falls on top of them.)

 

( The Knight and Alison rush into the crowd- the battle- and the Knight starts running over to a Red Queen's Knight to fight him)

Alison- " Wait! "

( The Knight stops, and turns around)

Alison- " What is your name? "

Knight- " Kristofer! "

( The Knight is swept away by other Knights- living, dead, Red and White)

( Alison stands for a moment, then runs over to a collapsed bridge- she takes cover under it)

( Alison begins to sob, but looks up when she senses movment infront of her)

White Queen- " Goodbye Alice! "

( Alison frowns)

White Queen- " Oh, hello, dear. Why are you crying? "

( Alison frowns again)

Alison- " You aren't even going to ask my name before you try to console me? "

White Queen- " Oh, I know your name. Alison Icon Wonderland"

( Alison looks at the White Queen quizically. The White Queen had droopy blue eyes and thick, straight, gun metal grey hair. She was very tall and had a pointed chin. She has an elegant build and her skin is pale. Her dress is atractive, and completly white)

Alison- " Oh my Goodness, your the White Queen! "

( The White Queen nods)

White Queen- " Now, Dear, why are you crying? "

Alison- " I havn't seen my father and mother since I was five- I'm sixteen now-, and now the only person who's been nice to me in eleven years is going to die! "

( She begins to sob all over again)

White Queen- " Now, now, Alison! Kristofer is a very good fighter- in fact he'll be fighting someone now, and winning. Now, Alison, it's getting late. It's time you went to sleep, if you can, in this noise! "

( Alison giggles, and hugs her knees)

 

( On the other side of the bridge, Kristofer lies helmetless, and bleeding, but still alive. He had silky, straight, blood red hair, and large, coffee coloured eyes) 

Reviews

[Taylor H.]

when she senses movment infront of her----when she senses movement in front of her

White Queen quizically-----quizzically


Her dress is atractive, and completly white=-----Her dress is attractive, and completely white


I think this needs more description. Say more than the dress is attractive. Something attravtive to you may not be attractive to me and if you want this on the screen or a play than you need to be more descriptive for the costume designers, directors and even the writers. I would add more detail and even where you want your actors standing and what you want them to do. YOu dont need to write liek a novel just jot some stuff down that you want them doing. Its simple. This is a lot better than some plays/ screen plays Ive read on here but it still needs some work

[emilythestrange]

Yeah this was ages ago but I only just noticed it...I'll fix everything once I've finished writing it...It's just easier than going through everything at once and going insane because of all spelling mistakes/simple things I've missed...I know I shouldn't write it like a novel, I just do...I'll try harder and get better at writing screenplays...