Drowning My Sorrows

Taking the cliche 'Drowning My Sorrows' very literally.

The water was cold at first. It came out slow, but then faster, and faster. I stepped into the tub, fully clothed in sheets of black. The tattoos on my stomach faded, until the colors twirled around, riding the small waves that my subtle movements had fashioned. I was at peace.

 

 My ears went first; and then my cheeks. The water flooded my flat, imperfect, face, and I smiled. Just before my eyes were consumed by the unforgiving water, I looked over at the toilet, to the half- empty bottle of Jack, and then down to the once white, and now brown, linoleum floor.

 

Under the water, I was finally alone. Nobody could hear my screams, or see the scars. Nobody could hurt me, like the world had always seemed to want to do. I was a mistake of birth, a victim of society, nothing more than a corrupted waste of life.

 

And now I've come to learn that I'm not the only one. Not the only girl, in the only small town, who swore she'd never love. Whose heart was guarded by black, withered leaves of ivy, and thorns. And does the world need any more?

 

The water was cold at first, but now my body is numb. I sank to the bottom, and rid the world of my relentless spirit. Life had nothing left to give me, so I drowned my sorrows in the tub.

Reviews

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

A very surreal piece... I have to wonder bout people who really do such a thing... they believe they are strong for doing it when actually they are weak... I agree with the other person, you leave some to the read as to what happened in the end... did they die literally or find the truth underwater and become born again.

[Dream Weaver]

An all too real scenario that happens more then people
would want to hear. Very tragic write but awareness is
key. Great write.

[Cassiopia Summers]

My friend, you are going to be a very famous author one day.

[Zachary_James]

Great job

[Adelia Alighieri]

I like this; it's neat. And it's real. For every human, it leaves a response. Great work, I can see myself in it.

[Removed Account]

I agree with River, I would love for you to write a Young adult book....i think you would write for that genre like a Champ!
Watch out Stephanie Meyer....your writing is MUCH better than hers.
More creative...more everything.
You would sell a billion copys. Awesome

[River Wilson]

Hmm this sounds similar to alot of things my sister writes.
I always say to her, that there needs to be more emotion.
You can not jsut keep one, same feeling, throughout the whole piece and expect people to Empathise(not sympathise).
Like all off your work, its truly great.
You have a lot of talent, i will certainly buy a book of yours!

[Ashley Black]

very good write. very nice word choice. overall very good keep it up

[Jessica]

this is very good

[Savanna Lee]

I think it's interesting how you almost lose what's going on to the character's thoughts, but the repetition of that first phrase at the end brings you back to the reality of what's happening...
It puts you in the mind of the person without being to blunt about it. A very good piece of writing :)