Drowning My Sorrows

Taking the cliche 'Drowning My Sorrows' very literally.

The water was cold at first. It came out slow, but then faster, and faster. I stepped into the tub, fully clothed in sheets of black. The tattoos on my stomach faded, until the colors twirled around, riding the small waves that my subtle movements had fashioned. I was at peace.

 

 My ears went first; and then my cheeks. The water flooded my flat, imperfect, face, and I smiled. Just before my eyes were consumed by the unforgiving water, I looked over at the toilet, to the half- empty bottle of Jack, and then down to the once white, and now brown, linoleum floor.

 

Under the water, I was finally alone. Nobody could hear my screams, or see the scars. Nobody could hurt me, like the world had always seemed to want to do. I was a mistake of birth, a victim of society, nothing more than a corrupted waste of life.

 

And now I've come to learn that I'm not the only one. Not the only girl, in the only small town, who swore she'd never love. Whose heart was guarded by black, withered leaves of ivy, and thorns. And does the world need any more?

 

The water was cold at first, but now my body is numb. I sank to the bottom, and rid the world of my relentless spirit. Life had nothing left to give me, so I drowned my sorrows in the tub.

Reviews

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

A very surreal piece... I have to wonder bout people who really do such a thing... they believe they are strong for doing it when actually they are weak... I agree with the other person, you leave some to the read as to what happened in the end... did they die literally or find the truth underwater and become born again.

[Proletariat Uprising]

Well, thank you very kindly for ruining my jovial mood. I think I'll go slit my wrists now.

Oh, and this was great.

[erikaguest]

"Just before my eyes were consumed by the unforgiving water, I looked over at the toilet, to the half- empty bottle of Jack, and then down to the once white, and now brown, linoleum floor." I like the way this sentence flows.

This is a really neat piece of writing. Very expressive :)

[the-One-with-the-Darkne..]

I really enjoyed this. I very much enjoy your writings. You have and incredible imagery. I really liked this I like how u described ur heart as guarded by black thorns it has a good image in my mind.Very very good. Your writings are short but the emotion is so clearly there its incredible

[A.Lee]

I thought this was really good. I think a lot of people have felt like this before. I like the repetition of "The water was cold at first" in the first and last paragraphs. NIce work.

[Kat Plunkett]

this was really good.. Just know you arent alone in feeling the way you do. there are alot of other people who feel the same way.

[IAmFiyah]

You're a versatile young writer. After reading the poem about your mom I did not know you had this in you. Keep it up.

[Charles]

Nice piece of 'flash fiction, perhaps? A disturbing theme, but presented well. I'm glad the subject wasn't you. :-)

[A. K. MAXIMILIEN]

Very Creative and interesting, keep up the good work!

[Norma M Sutton]

Well written and disturbing.

[Cassi M.]

This piece is very realistic, and yet so powerful. It describes a very relatable emotion. It almost made me cry! Very descriptive as well, job well done.