Immortal's Kiss

When the light shone through the door

She quietly stopped breathing

A warm breeze filtered through the window

She glanced at the easy escape

But the figure barged into her room

Black and as cold as night

She could not move

She could not cry

There was nothing waking her

From this nightmare turning reality

A cry for help was not heard nor was it screamed

As her blood was drained from her body

On that summers’ eve.

 

Author's Note

I had a longing to wite a poem about vampires, so let me know what you think. honesty please!

Reviews

[Jim Clarke]

You had me believing!

[Laura Ex]

this makes me think of rudolf's dad?
i miss rudolf and franki and benji and lili and dylan so much! i hope you have written more.

[Ian]

Love vampires!
This is quite different to other pieces about vampires I've read...
I like it a lot...
Though I would love if this piece was a little longer...
Still I like this a lot and I think it is a wonderful poem, very intense...
Great write!

[Bhavya Kaushik]

Oh! This was so breathtakingly beautiful :-O
This was really dark yet so vivid and flawless....vampires always add that touch in any writing which attract readers a lot!

[(:]

Vamps ;]
Anyways, I like it.
Mysterious and creepy.
Chills!

[Ryan Heisel]

such a deep, dark, creepy poem. in such few words you put a detailed image in my head. i realy wish you would have entered this in my last contest. great write indeed!!