Stolen Innocence

Rape is not something people should joke about.

 

I can feel the pressure

as the blood begins to flow.

I can't make a sound,

so no one will ever know.

And why did it have to be me

of all the ones who could have

fallen victim?

But violently you steal my innocence

as I release a silent scream.

And I can see all the hopes

of living again fade away like a dream.

Author's Note

I had a hard time writing this one. especially since I do not know what it is like. I hope I never will and I hope people will stop joking about it like they do. please send me an honest review. much love.

Reviews

[Awake.&.Unafraid]

You did this in such a visceral and open manner, you really have a talent for writing straight to the heart! This is an amazingly powerful piece, I like the rhyming scheme and I think the length lends to the message, it seems to hit you hard and then retreat fast to leave you thinking. Beautiful job on this!

[GamingGal]

Pros: This is always such a hard topic to write on. I, personally, have never had to experience such a thing, and I hope you never have to either. Although, I know people who have, and this description is spot on. You communicate the shame and pain of it all in a sophisticated, non-crude way.

Cons: Only one suggestion, perhaps change the wording of the last two lines to "And I can see a the hopes of living again/ fade away like a dream." That's my opinion, though.

Overall: This is a well-written poem that conveys emotions on a hard to talk about subject. And for not having experienced it, you did quite well.

[Laura Ex]

another beautiful poem. it's amazing that you can convey the emotions and stuff even though you never experienced it.
great job. :]

[Changed to a New Accoun..]

this was amazing and i can really understand how u feel... i can relate more than u think....
amazing poem!

[Tai-San]

I know what this is like. this happened to me in december,, believe it or not. It really is a good write. I dont even know how to put what happened to me in a poem.

[Eyudo]

i thought it may be about what they cal a "sensitive" subject, i see it is rape, and though you've never felt it you captured it quite well, which is not easy to do. good job, anything else that needs read just pass on to me, i really do like your stuff.

[Bhavya Kaushik]

This is really such a strong subject to write upon and I'm really very much impressed by your words here, this is a poem which I think everyone here on this site should read...
Really great job!

[Stella]

I have to say i really liked it.