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inspired by Florence + the machine

the drugs are wearing off 

but the room is still spinning 

catch me, hold me-- baby, you’re winning 

mama told me to stay away from boys like you 

but i’ll never listen 

the tears in your eyes, oh how they glisten 

the shards of the mirror 

lie broken on the floor 

catch a glimpse of the girl i don’t know anymore 

my hair is tangled and my eyes are dark 

a ghost, a shadow, my spirit shattered 

i was someone who once mattered

i wish i had arms to hold you 

instead of push you away 

my arms, they are so tired and it’s getting late 

queen of peace come save me 

lead me out the door 

it’s hard to dance with the devil, when you’re a prisoner of war 

the drugs are wearing off 

but the room is still spinning 

catch me, hold me-- baby, you’re winning

Reviews

[Chris]

Seems many are having a hard time coping with their lives as the times continue to beat on their psyche. Personal interactions coupled with continued frustrations and the stress of having to deal anyway bite.

This piece reminded me that we really aren't alone in these days.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

love the subtle rhyme in this piece...I almost didn't notice it...I like that because it allows me to focus on content...on the heart and guts of a piece.
My arms fell off a few times trying to hold on to what really wasn't there...I just kept hoping it was.
really like your work, Liz.
j.

[Chris Shaw]

it's hard to dance with the devil, when you are a prisoner of war. Addictions, so hard to break.

What an incredibly powerful line that is. I love Florence and the Machine.

Chris

[Carlos Lorenzo Estrada]

The flow of this poem felt very much like a song. Very powerful and evocative in its theme. I really enjoyed reading this. Thanks for sharing your art.

[Elizabeth Mercado]

Thanks for your kind words, Carlos. I'm just staring out on this website and I really appreciate the feedback :)

[Carlos Lorenzo Estrada]

I'm still quite new myself probably about 2 or 3 months. This community has been very kind and supportive. For all writers in the many genres. If you read something you enjoy don't hesitate to let the writer know. And most importantly write and never stop because it truly is a lifetime journey. And when your ready to post your work don't be afraid to your words have a home here, and so do you.