Last Chance

We The Kings <3

Say a prayer since we're here again

In this same situation

Laying here under the sun

Watching the clouds go by

 

Break down the walls that hold us back

Since we're not going to let them hold us in

Let's not let this chance just slip away

Since we’re already drowning in sin

 

There's no way we're allowed to go back

Since there's no chance that tomorrow'll come

Please just stay here by my side

Since we can't take the chance to run

 

We’re not the kids we were anymore

So let's take our one fighting chance

And break down those god-forsaken walls

Before we fall back into their hands

 

Had you known we'd be in this mess

Would you still have taken the risk

Let's take the last chance we'll ever know

And get the hell out of this

 

We're in for something big

And this could be something huge

So why are we holding back

When we've got so little to lose

 

Just sit back and watch 
Let me pave a path you've never seen

I've got no clue where this could lead

But I want to see this happy ending 

Author's Note

This is my first poem in a while. I guess I suddenly felt like writing :) I think it's been almost 4 months since I've written something, so have mercy on it. Hopefully this is the end of the writersblock.

Reviews

[Worms]

Love it
I say that absolutely fight back
especially if you can't win
if only for what may be
and even if we forget what is for it

[Brotha_Man_Dan]

i really like the emotion in this 10/10

[sammyj]

very cool. loved it

[Marquise]

yay!! welcome back from your four month lay off. :-) good start and very good message. i like how you generalized it to fit anyones situation. very good choice of words nerd!

[Alexander Z. Anthony]

Thumbs up.
You know you have a good poem when it can evoke an emotional response from the reader. You know you have a great poem when it can make the reader imagine that which is written down, coming to life in their mind. I thought about this poem for a good minute or two, playing over different scenarios of why "they" would be doing what they are doing. Why they're breaking down the walls. etc. I literally played with it back and forth in my mind. This makes the poem near unforgetable. Evoking an emotional response is a positive thing, but going beyond that, is truly epic. Gratz.
-Azza

[zendikar]

wow this is pretty good great for just starting up again! keep up the good work and keep writing!!!

[Roger Ferguson II]

this is a great piece. it seems honest, and for me at least thats the best thing a poem can be. i agree with Dutch jr. the last line does feel a little forced. But overall this is a very well written poem.

[Sharkapillar]

I love this! Very powerful. I love the seconds and fifth stanzas. This is very inspirational, I don't know how to explain it. It gives a feeling of invicibility, sort of. Fantabulous job! :D ♥

[Deepshikha]

Ah, love. What can that rapid, tsunami-like emotion pull out of us? Nice comeback. (:

[Zeitgeist Manifesto]

This poem is like watching a caterpillar morph into a butterfly.
I felt like I've witnessed the birth of something great. This had
to be the best way to return. Welcome back! You did an awesome
job!