I Gotta Pee

for my dear best friend, Deepshikha, who suggested i write about how she's feeling at the moment when i asked her for a topic :D

I'm crossing my legs

Watching the clock

Waiting for the bell

Before people gawk

I'll run out of the room

Not a moment too soon

And run back to my place

Before I'm marked late

I've got my homework out

And pencil in hand

Just waiting for the sound

One sound of command

The seconds tick by

My palms become damp

My breath becomes deep

I'm caught by a clamp

This feeling erupts

It's getting hard to see

Only a few more minutes

But s**t, I gotta pee

Reviews

[Alexander Z. Anthony]

Haha, very nice. I like it.
There's something about short, funny poems that appeals to everyone.

"My palms became damp
My breath becomes deep"
You change from "became" to "become"
It looks like you meant "become" the first time. I think it would look better that way.
Good write,
-Azza

[gravitylava]

ahahahahaha funny, i like the last line. good job. :)

[JC]

ha! thats great!!

[ZmH]

lol i like this its funny good job

[(Super) Heroes Never Di..]

wow, this is hilarious. what a riot! loved it.

[Clockwork]

This is a pretty fun piece actually. I had a laugh at it. I remember things like this from freshman year. I liked the rhyming you used overall. I think that you could re-word line four, something like "Students to run a muck maybe." Overall it is a nice piece, and I enjoyed reading it.

[Deepshikha]

OHMYGAAAD. FORGET WHAT I'VE EVER SAID, THIS IS YOUR BEST WRITING EVAH.

[_////---Elektrik Phanto..]

sharp wits, funny poem- thanx!