Facade

Will you traverse with me across my world

Shelter me inside your arms

Succumb to my constant, urgent wants

Please the fickle child in me

Calm the thunderous roars around

Cover the earth in pristine peace

Level the ground so I don't trip and fall

Bring to a smile to my countenance

Gather gems so sparse and rare

That twinkle more than stars ever could

And present to me what I covet

Or is your façade truly a lie, as I can see are your woven tales of loyalty

Will you stand to you words or stand by me, together

Not a servant bowing to my feet

For your beliefs of what I am are different than what they should be

You couldn't possibly understand the inner workings of my mind

If your eyes cannot see through my own

Into an elaborate soul caught in the midst of infinite confusion

Fighting silently through day and night

Working towards a greater goal than possibly imaginable

Having told none about such dreams of….

Yet that is what secrets are

And an admiring twat is unwanted

However, should you still feel the need to walk in my tracks

Trace my image through your mind

And bestow upon me material possessions

Which I would rather you bestow upon someone far more worthy or needy of such

Then I applaud your futile tenacity

And will make note to leave you with something to dwell on

Than the façade I played before you for all these years

When I leave this place and your line of sight forever more  

Reviews

[Zeitgeist Manifesto]

For some strange reason..parts of this poem came to me as portraits of Cleopatra and Salome. It brings to mind, many Femme Fatales in history who have shaped powerful men to their liking. There is darkness in the words, but the cold and calculating mind of this person disturbs me the most. You've created a piece of work that leaves an impression. The lack of empathy and sense of entitlement are unbelievable. Not only have you created a startling character here, but you have created a spirit that took on a life of it's own. This is Deep.

[Chris Lotus]

Wowee!!! This is an exceedingly great piece. The last 4 lines are heavy hitters. I read those and I felt like it hit me like a semi in the face. Very powerful wording and tone. Very good piece!

[Ian]

excellent this poem just blew my mind

[Orlando Murcia]

Excellent piece!

You know how to use words
that I didn't even know how to use

But in all seriousness this was a marvelous piece

Great work!

[Kaitlin]

Ok seriously, this is beyond amazing. I enjoyed every single line in this poem. I love how it contains many abstract ideas yet its still perfectly realistic. I also love your use of metaphors, its very creative.

[MattWheatus]

Stunning!! Vocab range is amazing and used so aptly and to such effect. These three lines in particular are wonderful:

Gather gems so sparse and rare
That twinkle more than stars ever could
And present to me what I covet

[cheeeeese]

Wow, this poem was VERY well-written. I was glad I stumbled upon this piece, it was amazing. And might I say, you have nice vocabulary words in here. Great job 100%

[AFX787359]

Impressive and creative! :) The execution was amazing and your choice of vocabulary was great! :)

[Alexander Z. Anthony]

=O ...The first thing that comes to mind is "OWNED!"
That was really good! I was very impressed with the diction, and am glad to find another writer who can fit "dwell" and "twat" into their works!
I liked the theme, it fits in with the style I use myself, all in all, keep up the good work!
And thanks for your review btw!
-Azza

[vandana]

Please the fickle child in me
Calm the thunderous roars around
Cover the earth in pristine peace

Your thoughts and feelings so well expressed about the inner child in you. Thank you for sharing.

[_////---Elektrik Phanto..]

you're very independent i can tell.
"...For your beliefs of what I am..." is a poem in and of itself. beautifully written are the words you share. thanks and keep 'em comin'. :)