Back Off

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There's only so many feet you can push me

Til I reach the very edge

So don't shove me any further

You'll regret it I swear

 

I can handle the lies you say to my face

The backstabbing is uncalled for

Don't listen to them; you’re the jack, I'm the ace

No more can I ignore

 

So back off

Don't push me, don't shove me

Cause in the end you'll get hurt, and I'll walk away

 

Back off

I can't hold out any longer

If I let go my temper, you'll meet the worst

So back off

 

Even the paranormal have their limits

Am I the experiment you try

The fickle choices you make

Are eroding the ropes of our dangling ties

 

The wishes you make on the stars

The loving words you say to me

I can see the darkness behind it all

So how is it that you're blind to me

 

Back off

Give me the space I need, the place I need

There's a boundary that you can't cross

 

Back off

Let me live for me, love for me

There's a thin line between us, and you won't get across

So back off

 

Just because I haven't screamed yet, doesn't mean I'll hold out

Only you could think that way

 

And just because you're still here, doesn't mean it'll last

So don't hold out for me

 

When I look at you I can the treachery

I know you're a traitor, I can see your lies

 

I can't understand why you'd do this to me

So live a little, learn a little, tell me goodbye

 

Back off

Let me stand on my own, fight on my own

I don't need a man if you can't provide

 

Back off

Walk away and don't turn back

March away with all of your pride

 

Just back off

 

 

Reviews

[Niko Azazel]

wow...this is extremely powerful and filled with tons of emotion...i like this very much...i like how it flows and really gets down to the nitty gritty of what ur feeling...
"Let me stand on my own, fight on my own,
I don't need a man if you can't provide"

[Marquise]

Even the paranormal have their limits

Am I the experiment you try

The fickle choices you make

Are eroding the ropes of our dangling ties

whew!! you are going to be something else real soon! This piece is very good, but I think you can get deeper. Take some time, go thru more of some of life's experiences and either come back to this piece or write something else similar. I hope you do. The words "back off" alone are powerful. When you are tired of being hurt and giving chance after chance, torturing yourself just to be loved, it takes a toll on you and all you want that person to do is back off.

Have you ever performed any of your pieces at a school event or open mic? if not then I suggest you do.. its always gives you another perspective of your work "hearing it" instead of reading. very good, one to go in my favs. :)

take care CN :)

[Rain]

Wow this poem is very powerful
the more i read the more you put me on the edge of my seat!
You've scared me and yet its just words.. but such powerful words

Back off

I can't hold out any longer
If I let go my temper, you'll meet the worst

You have talent :)

So back off



Even the paranormal have their limits

Am I the experiment you try

The fickle choices you make

Are eroding the ropes of our dangling ties



The wishes you make on the stars

The loving words you say to me

I can see the darkness behind it all

So how is it that you're blind to me

[Zeitgeist Manifesto]

This poem was like witnessing a castration. Wow. You're not even talking to me and you hurt my feelings.

The wishes you make on the stars
The loving words you say to me
I can see the darkness behind it all
So how is it that you're blind to me

I especially enjoyed how you framed this situation and reversed the meaning.
I never thought about how huge the night star is compared to a few shimmering lights. Its also interesting that this person could work so hard to deceive that they don't even realize the lies aren't being bought.

[Deepshikha]

So I hope you weren't expecting anything constructive...
But anyway, I was able to sing this in my head. "Legit."
It's nicely written, good phrasing, a little repetitive, but since they're lyrics, that's okay.

[Impulse]

A very emotionally powerful poem. If someone treats you like that I'd have to say that you truly are better off without them. Nice work =]