Don't Belong Here

 

 

Fragrant winds waft from the trees

As the ancient eagles scan the skies

Only the sounds of a billowing breeze

Catastrophes made with futile  tries 

 

Dewy droplets mark the day

Voracious want surpasses need

Wanton hope diminished away

Benevolence; facades of impudent greed

 

Sanguine blood as history on walls

Ignorance raging like ruthless famine

The endless tales of great rises and falls

Daily conflicts of detest and chagrin

 

Crawling, sprawling for asylum from the rain

Wanting, hoping for shelter for the night

Recoiling, flinching from the overwhelming pain

Knowing, within, that's there's no white light

 

Searching, far and wide, for answers right before us

Waiting, and guessing solutions that are wrong

Stubborn, impertinent and completely capricious

We uphold all the qualities that won't ever make us strong

Because in a world of natural aestheticism

Industrialized monsters like us don't belong

 

Reviews

[LivingDeath]

Wow very good write, the intense use of very large words that i dont know the meaning of really make this poem standout lol. But its true from what i got of it, that our world is such a beautiful place full of life and nature but with the people industrializing our planet, they just shouldn't be here because they are destroying our planet. But the thing is its not just industrial workers, its all of us, we just cant see that we are slowly wrecking our planet. Good write.

[Neronine]

Amazing, I really don't know what else to say. 0_0

[Deepshikha]

Ah, humanity. The BANE of my existence.
"Industrialized monsters like us don't belong."
No, no we don't. [:
Anyway, you've still got your "One Free In-Depth Critique" to cash in.
And good luck with the chocolate. XD

[A]

Very interesting, and very fun to read. xP

[Sexy P3nguin]

I usually point out my favorite line of a poem but with this one its the whole poem lol

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

First off very catchy piece... great rhythm rhyming scheme.... the poem it self as quite an erie undertone but in a fun way.... on top of it all a powerful message.