What is this?

What is this thing I feel?

This feeling deep inside

This tingling sensation I've never felt

That throws away my pride

 

It turns my thoughts to jumbled jargon

And makes my heartbeat hum

It morphs my voice to nervous mumbles

Like an infant beating a drum

 

And maybe there's a reason for this

A reason I cannot find

A certain person might be thy cause

Who sits upon my mind

 

And forever there he stays making me wonder

How can I put him astray

And futilely I try again and again

To make him go away

 

And others come and others go

And tell me tales of great heroes

Who felt this feeling amidst their woes

 

And there I lay just wondering

As the rain and hail keep thundering

And that barraging snow keeps plundering

 

At this whole new world I've landed in

As exquisite as a paladin

Which coos as velvety as a mandolin

 

 

And here I'll stay

 forever this way

Til this feeling comes and goes

On morrow a new day begins

And once again this feeling comes

Like a blank new sheet of snow

Author's Note

Yeah, i just sorta wrote what i'm thinking, so don't mind that it sucks lol

Reviews

[Mioki]

I agree with Sulen, this defiantly doesn't suck. It seems to be a trail of thoughts, but that works well with the poem because the reader can picture someone lying down and just thinking of this entirely new sensation. You really have a way with words, and that makes this poem flow earnestly. Overall, I thought it was an interesting write, and heartwarmingly confusing.

[Suki]

this doesnt suck at all! this is really really good actually. and i like how you think lol