Hm, this was a unique view on death. Although it wasn't wordy, you were still able to get a reaction from the reader, and it had meaning. Some poems with a lot of words aren't even able to do that, so I give you kudos for getting it in there. This poem also makes the reader feel slightly fearful and cold at the same time. "What is death?" they begin to ask themselves. Well, your poem sounds what I imagine it would be like. This was a very thought enticing piece, I'm glad to have read it.
Excellent rhyme. The meter was abstract, but what about death really isn't; yet however, you did a great job making the flow work. Of cousre with use words such as deception and sanquine blood I am seeing a vampire. And vampire are metaphors synomynous with life and death. Yet this poem is about death it has a life and depth of it's own in a few short words, all undertaking great imagery. You may be able to sale this to the magazine Monsters Next Door, if not check back with me, I have another lying around here.
this is different. i like the poem because it gives me a different look on what you think death is besides my own. i think the poem is well written and straight to the poem. it gave me chills and shivers.
Guess it's time to finally update this thing:)
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