Velhud's lullaby

One of the characters I designed.

Rumor has it, that the pride
was core of all the elven souls
but rumors tend, when worldwide,
to bend when reaching castle walls.

Velhud was a true exception
for his pride was likely none,
as part of darker age inception
on path of the assassin gone.

Homeless, with a bow and quiver,
his only friends were his own arrows.
Lords, mages, all would shiver
when entering the darkest shadows.

No one knew the very truth
and no one ever dared to ask,
but behind this fearsome brute
was heart, so kind behind a mask.

No one knew that he was starving,
killing only to survive.
All he needed was a darling
and gold to keep himself alive.

Heavens punished the poor Velhud,
so every time he fell asleep
nightmares came as pool of hell blood
to wake him up and make him weep.

No lullaby would cure his curse,
though he scorned his deeds wrong,
his condition got worse and worse,
but soon salvation came along.

Once, when moon was full and bright
his dream, a shadow did invade,
said "I am mistress of the night"
and then drew out a shining blade.

"I shall break the curse of yours" -
She placed her sword upon his neck,
"...since you cry and show remorse."
and so his nightmare she did wreck.

"There is price to pay, young boy,
for things are never what they seem.
Thou shall find love and joy,
but thou shall never, ever dream!"

"Thou shall kill, but not as sin!
Your kingdom needs protection sworn,
this fate shall spread upon your kin
and thus your legend shall be born!"

The sharpshooter sought the throne,
his vocation found, and wife.
Slaying foes for justice, grown,
he lived a Royal Hunter's life.

Author's Note

Open to any comments/critics.

Reviews

[Nusquam Esse]

I really enjoy narrative poetry, especially when it so concisely carries its meaning. This is great, and I really enjoyed it. I think a bit of work on the meter would be wise, but not necessary, since most lines hover around the vicinity of 7-8 syllables. Here are my suggestions, take them as you will.

While I appreciate unconventional rhymes (which you do a few times here), I think souls/walls is pushing it too far, it just feels like a weak rhyme.
Maybe try using knoll or shoal as alternatives? "To distort over distant knolls"
Then, in stanza three, I recommend dropping 'own', it is unneccesary, and throws off the syllable count enough to make the line 'hang'.
For the same reason, drop 'ever' from stanza four.
You start stanzas four and five with 'no one knew', I generally avoid such repetition, so I would personally rephrase one of them.
Stanza six, I would reword the last line, it feels awkward, and and 'wake up' feels weak. Try "Everytime he was sleeping, nightmares came dripping as hell-blood, to rouse him with screams weeping, So did heaven punish poor Velhud"
stanza seven, use 'grew' instead of 'got', it is an ugly word.

[elvenom]

Oh, this is my first constructive critic I recieve, with suggestions. Thank you very much, I'll chek and see how it will work out with your advice. I'm really grateful.

[Nusquam Esse]

No worries, this is how I generally do reviews.