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This is something i wrote in creative writing class at USDAN,my summer camp. We had to describe our view of the camp. it is not very direct, so please analyze it in whatever you choose to. If you have questions or comments please let me know.

Manmade junk in a beautiful realm,

world of life and peace,

with steps and cabins, of noise and anger,

and all this in a place where meaning is not needed.

 

Us creating means,

and rationality and tangibility, all following up to the destruction of it

to bring back the realm of peace.

Author's Note

If you would like to know the actual environment of the camp, it is highly wooded with smallish huts scattered around each manifesting a different activity.

Reviews

[Kyle]

awww! mannnn! lexy beat me to it!!!! i wanted 2 review first :'-6...oh well, cole! this
is a great poem, and your imagery is pitch perfect (since ive been 2 USDAN i can
reallly picture what you mean) your word choice is also qute unique, and brings the
meaning and resinance of your poem 2 a higher level, well done :)

keep up the good work, and keep submitting writing!

kyle

[kbob]

I didn't read that it was about USDAN until after i read it so i thought it meant the apocolypse or something. You can't blame me though. It says:

and rationality and tangibility, all following up to the destruction of it
to bring back the realm of peace.

reading that out of context kinda makes it sound different. Still, good write.

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Manmade junk in a beautiful realm,
world of life and peace,

Love those lines and true
this is well written

[Lexy]

This is really good!!!!!!!!!!!

rebring should be "bring back" or "bring again" =)

It's a shame that you said that you don't like to write poems. I can't wait to read your other work.