stardust

just random thoughts put into a poem about how i feel

stardust falling

from your eyes

green like the seas

blue like the skies

gray like the wind.

stardust falling

onto everything

around you

making it brighter.

stardust falling

into my life

making it

shine brighter.

stardust from your eyes

making me feel needed

and wanted

and right.

stardust falling

from your lips

your fingers

your body.

brightening everything

around you.

stardust,

stardust.

Author's Note

i usually don't use too much repetition in my poetry. . . hope it reads alright!

Reviews

[Anna]

The repetition works in this piece! i enjoyed it nicely done!

[jmt8921]

I liked the imagery. Star dust is a really cool concept. I think this poem would read a little better if you took out the "brighter" after shine, and maybe even the "brightening" before "everything around you", but that one I'd be less sure of.