make this the one you remember [tell everyone.]

don't worry about me

you know i'll be fine

flying around, happy and free

in good time you'll be mine

 

i just need time

that's all he would say

and thoughts of others

would fill his head

to a point

slightly beyond safe

 

i know my next move

should be right now

and as i move in

you take me someplace else

oh, somewhere else

 

and it's the darkest night

for me tonight because

your soft light isn't here

to warm my heart

oh not this time

 

see me, hold me,

but please don't think you're trapped

don't forget to kiss good night and

i won't forget to call out your name

 

oh and a line in a song can be

oh so critical

critical of me not reinventing the wheel..

 

come back to me

you won't be able to keep me away

i said come back to me

or i'll come back to you

Author's Note

the stanzas arent very related for the most part. or at least not obviously. i know its all sorta chaotic, but i just wanted to put this up here.

Reviews

[LlamaLord]

Oo interesting. Very thought provoking. I had to read this three times before I was satisfied with my thinkings of it... haha. I love these lines!!
"and it's the darkest night

for me tonight because

your soft light isn't here

to warm my heart

oh not this time"
The fact that you said you were in the dark before, made the entire stanza. Real nice writing here Jake :D

-Austin

[deeps]

Very interesting write here and yes very thought provoking,
I enjoyed this write alot. very well written.