i don't want the sky, blue sky <------- ??

sitting down right next to you

getting lost for a moment

in your stories...

two days later

the world's different

 

oh how carefree

those old days were

oh, my blind eyes

disregarded the signs

but the moment should have lasted

forever and

ever

 

ridiculously beautiful

too good to be true

thoughts race through my mind

as i'm sailing through

the untroubled air

you don't know how lucky you are

 

it was fun while it lasted

and it should have lasted years

not that it matters

 

as i lay flat on the floor..

Author's Note

where is this all coming from????

Reviews

[Bhavya Kaushik]

Hmm....it was nice :)
I agree with Austin regarding the concept of the theme of this poem and what can a reader think after reading this.
Though, I think so that the the verse starting with "Ridiculously beautiful" needs a polishing :)
Rest it was a good piece and the thought was really very well conveyed.

[LlamaLord]

This really has two sides to it. One being a good side one seeming to be sort of hopeless. A great read though! :) Thanks