wondering, wandering

bask in the randomness.

i need directions

can you give me

directions to the heart of the problem?

the heart of the problem

 

i need some help

fell into a hole

can you give me a hand

can you help me up??

 

sit down here

i just wanna talk

 

well i never thought i could lose you

tell me, what's going on?

where's my mind?

the forgotten words that i said to you

you're what keeps me wondering,

and wandering

 

forget us when you turn around

i have another verse, another

way to survive

the things that have me crumbling

the torture of this happening

 

when stranded isn't close enough

and heartbreak fills you up

to the brim, up to the brim

 

i feel another ache coming on

where is this all coming from??

i don't ever mean what i say

i smile and then

i'm gone, then i'm gone

 

near you

has always been my favorite place

lost at sea

and i can go on wandering,

wondering

 

about where all this

is coming from.

Author's Note

again, not personal.

Reviews

[LlamaLord]

In a way, this poem is the perfect length. You tell us about how you feel, what you need, what you want, personal honestly, etc. You left nothing out (in my opinion) and you also didn't stay on one subject too long. I think that is what kept me reading. It was the fact that every stanza had a change in emotion of some sort. Nice read :)

[David]

It was for the most part a terrific read. I found it had an underlying rhythm (at least to me anyways) and it flowed together much like the lyrics to a song. Some of the parts were a little repetitive na dit was a wee bit bothersome. Hey, thats juyst me though, I speak for myself, so dont let it get you down. All in all it went together nicely and I enjoyed it very much. Kepp it going. xP
-Dave-