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A Poem by SilentDreamer



When you're around
I can't help thinking:
Die in a hole,
Crash into a tree,
Fall off a cliff-
Just get away from me
.
And not just me really
The whole family.
There are things that
I really shouldn't have to be worrying about,
Simple things other people
Don't have to even think twice about.
And no one will know the full
Extent of it.
I'm so sick of being threatened
In my own home.
I'm so sick of fear.

© 2011 SilentDreamer


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A poem with a wild journey into thoughts. Thoughts spoken and not can make us feel weak and afraid. A lot of internal struggle in this amazing poem. I like it. Thank you for the outstanding poem.
Coyote

Posted 12 Years Ago


Powerful. A bit frightening, in that sad and oppressive way. The mind can be a cage and sometimes people in our lives put us there. I can identify as I myself have been in those situations. A solid write, well done!

Posted 12 Years Ago


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Real Good. Wonderfully sharp and aggressive. And I have to agree with Chris. If you can make the end scan a little easier, it will give it so much more clout. But the writing was alive. Scarily so. Superb write

Posted 12 Years Ago


very good expressive poem with rhythm & flow. Enjoyed reading it although the ending could have been made to rhyme. Thus giving it a more powerful end, Well done anyway.

Posted 12 Years Ago


Whew .. Strong emotion .. Don't know your age, but I'd get the heck outta there ..

real ... Jasmine x

Posted 12 Years Ago


WOW! i know who this is about. really strong words:) Keep writing


Posted 13 Years Ago


Wow, this poem sounds really intense. This best way to get over this is to let it go, that way the person has no power over you. hope things turn out or the better.

Posted 13 Years Ago



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Added on November 20, 2011
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