In the Rain

 

Blonde hair, blue eyes

We stare up into the sky

Wishing on a rain cloud

As the thunder roars loud

Trees sway in the wind

As we start to spin

In the rain, in the rain

Trees sway

Sky and ground collide

Lightening brightens the world

As we twirl

The wind sings

It's sad tale of loss, false love

And lies, lies, lies

You know you and I, you and I

We will fly

Away from here

Away from fear

No more tears, no more, no tears

The rain peirces me like knives

Blonde hair, blue eyes

In the rain, in the rain

Trees sway

Author's Note

Thanks for reading, please review and rate. I'm trying to get to a 95% rating! :) (I do not own the picture)

Reviews

[Palmer Blu]

This piece is definitely an attention grabber! The poem opens up with such description that it makes me yearn for more. The repetition in this poem is great, which is shocking because repetition can sometimes destroy the piece. The words are placed brilliantly and this is a key factor when writing poetry. Every image that you attempt to paint is pulled off flawlessly and I commend you that. Overall this ia great poem and you are clearly an amazing poet!

[Dream Weaver]

A beautiful fusion between natures fury
and loves demise...

[Cliff Rhodes]

I used to go jogging way out into the country and one day I got caught in sleeting rain, stings like little needles. Good write, this has very good imagery.

[Kat24]

Hi,
This is really good. I like how you wrote this. Kat24

[Matt G]

Good job. I can picture the rain and the trees swaying back and forth. :)

[PrincessZeldaWannabe]

It's so beautiful. Awesome job!

[J. R.]

Beautifully written with vivid imagery. It's sad, yet there's a hopefulness in it.

[HopelesslyDevoted]

this is amazing! its so beautiful but sad at the same time. i love the way you write, i have never been able to be this eloquent. its a wonderful poem!

[siri]

sounds like an amazing experience wish i get to experience it before I die. This poem makes me so happy I feel sad. I am done now.