The Third Road

Two roads diverged in a yellow wood,
and you think you know how this goes,
at thought, one would pass the less traveled,
Others, to one with less woes,

To tread is a choice one should make,
Is quite important, if not, to most,
So with a sigh, ponder... ponder...
to reach the utmost.

Weighing priorities; weighing... weighing...
The dilemma is but a period in life,
To choose one is to betray the other,
Deep within, a mind in strife.

Two roads diverged ahead your quest,
No rules say you must choose either.
Life is but one's own making,
So what I'd do is make another....

Reviews

[Mark]

Your poem has strong potential, Monster, but i feel its effedtiveness was marred by the repeatings of ponder and weighing in the second and third stanzas. It's as though you were stuck for a powerful, unique word, so you used a mundane one twice. This is of course only one man's opinion, but I am confident that, with a little more patience (and a good thesaurus!), this can be elevated from a pleasant verse to a truly moving poem.

[Monster ^.^]

Thank you very much!!! I have a tendency to do this, dragging a word twice. Maybe because I could imagine it echoing (the ellipses) and think it's kinda cool. Maybe next time I should do it with a powerful word instead of a mundane one, do you think that would work? Or should I just rid of that persistent habit? haha

[Marie]

Excellent idea...don't make a choice but your own way...

[Monster ^.^]

Thanks Marie :)

[Rhianne Ney]

Two roads diverged ahead your quest,
No rules say you must choose either.
Life is but one's own making,
So what I'd do is make another....

~ my fave lines~

Anyway, kababayan, this is a great poem to start with, the poet who wrote the piece is really mind boggling

You just place a new light to it and you're write all choices made are simply weighed and tried on.

But in the real world, we ca't just try trial and error all the time sometimes we really have to get on with our choices, change them or leave them to what it was supposed to be (:

~Rhianne Ney~

[Monster ^.^]

Thank you very much for the insight. :)

[Rhianne Ney]

Walang anuman, dude