A Bad Night

That day had been a pretty busy one so that when Josie came home, the comforts of her bed is what she had sought for. So, there she was, fast asleep.

It was a very peaceful night, not a very usual thing in the community. Usually, the neighbors hold parties down the block, with speakers full, their volume up to ‘who-cares-about-sleeping-people’ level. This time, however, let’s just say Josie's thankful it’s the otherwise. In fact, other than the clock ticking on her bedside table and the slight movement of her chest, everything was almost as still as the moon out there.

 

She was dreaming of flowers, heaps of them, actually. Not that she was a fan of flowers. She was allergic, but in this dream, they were sent to her by her boyfriend Dan, and that’s what makes them special.

They were running in the field, chasing each other, laughing all the while, throwing cheesy lines at each other as they did, and then… she fell down the cliff--

 

What the--?! she woke up panting; a drum-roll of knock from her window broke the bliss of her dream, as well as the silence of the night. She looked at the clock: 30 minutes to midnight. Who the f*ck is that?!

She stood up exasperatedly, and dragged herself towards the window pane. She pulled out the curtains and saw that it was her boyfriend. Her irritation suddenly turned to anxiety. What was he doing here?

 

She opened the window. The anxiety grew all the more when she saw Dan’s pained expression.

“W-what is it?” Josie muttered, unsure if this was the question to ask a frowning Dan. Well, it’s not as if she prepared for this. And besides, his problem couldn’t be something a good girlfriend like her can’t handle, right?

“I want to break up.”

Whoa. What was that? Was this part of the dream? She waited, but noticing the punch line was too much delayed, she laughed unceremoniously, “Nice one Dan, but seeing as it’s almost midnight, going here just to make that joke--”

“It isn’t a joke.” Dan interposed.

There was painful silence that followed.

Josie didn’t know what to feel. It had really been a tiresome day, and she didn’t know how to react to all this, at all. “W-why?” she whispered.

“What?”

“Why are you breaking up with me?” Josie completed. After putting them to words, it did something to her… Her stomach ached, and somewhere in her chest, a pain struck, almost unbearable. What was this feeling?

There was no answer.

“Is it another…?” She trailed off, not wanting to accuse, but when Dan bowed his head, she knew it was that.

Slap.

“It’s been a busy day, Dan.” She said with a tired voice, almost void of feelings as how she meant it to be, but a tear betrayed her. She loved this guy. She hoped the slap wasn't something they couldn't recover from... the other woman was for tomorrow... “Why don’t we call this a night? Tomorrow?”

“Right.” He said.

Josie closed the windows and returned to the warmth of the bed… but this time, it was not enough to bring her back to the wonderland that was Dan and flowers.

 

Author's Note

Grammar? I don't know. Haven't edited it yet :) I was like, this is fine... maybe? hahaha

Reviews

[AWickedMoon]

Great write. :)

[quinfinn]

nicely written and well told vignette. a little tuning up and it will be perfect.

[chaotic katie]

This is the kind of story that proves just how fast things can happen. Exellent work, i enjoyed reading

[critic h]

greatly written. You have done it well. But i found an awkward place. The word "slap" seems out of the way. maybe a sentence of slap fit into the situation. And the ending is perfect.

[Monster ^.^]

Thank you for that... and yes, I will try to see your work... so try not to spam me.

[critic h]

may you tell what is meant by spamming and how i am spamming you. actually i am pretty noob at such terms.

[Monster ^.^]

Ahh, you reviewed this work 3 times (i deleted the other two already) where in fact they are of no relevance here

[Toni]

Very good.
You wrote it well.
It seems like this happens all too much, you wrote about something real, which you always do, but I'm just saying.

[Monster ^.^]

Thank you antonette :)) as for you too :)

[Toni]

Oh you :)
You're welcome :-)

[Monster ^.^]

:)

[DriDri]

Great writing I love it, so sad that josie got broken up with :/ .

[Monster ^.^]

Thanks :))