Chapter 1

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From the moment I met her, I knew I wanted to know her name.

She was a phenomenal dancer. The way she glided across the dance floor made my knees shake. I didn't care if she knew my name, but the thought of her breathing mine both frightened and thrilled me. Ever meet somebody who immediately takes hold of every fiber of your being? They say jump, you say how high? I was prepared to do anything to meet this woman.

She was always surrounded with people. A loving and adoring public. She fit in with every crowd. Finally, she was alone. I swallowed my nervousness and (slid up next to her). She turned to me with a beautiful smile playing around on her lips, a tinge of pink glowing on them. "You're not from around here," she whispered. Her voice was like light and fluttery and caught him by surprise. I was surprised I could hear her above the music. 

"You caught me," I chuckled, hoping she couldn't sense my insecurity. "I just moved here. What's your name?" She placed her hand over mine and lightly ran her fingers along mine. I looked into her eyes. They were like the ocean. I was starstruck. She leaned in close and my breath caught. 

"God, you're beautiful." she breathed into my ear. My face flushed. She could tell how her movements affected me. I was completely under her control. 

"Please," I begged. "I have to know your name." She traced shapes on my cheek with her index finger. She must've decided to stop teasing me because she stood up and took my hand in hers. She kissed it softly and said, "Eliza. Eliza Fairchild."

And just like that, she was gone. Back to the adoring public. The crowd swallowed her and I didn't see her the rest of the night. 

I still felt her touching me when I made my way home. 

"Eliza," I whispered into the night. God, she had a hold on my heart. I wondered if I'd ever see her again. 

Author's Note

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