Human Being

I am a human being 

with organs and all,

I am a human being 

that feels love too.

You tell me you love me

 and it hurts for so many reasons. 

I see you staring blankly 

at the wall or by my door

I look at you and see a smile 

as I run.

I run for fear not of

me getting hurt,

but for fear of me 

loving you too

Author's Note

I understand that this poem may not make sense, but I would like for people to help me perfect it. If you feel I could reword a sentence or change some sentences please let me know.

Reviews

[Relic]

Things get complicated when it comes to love and the fear of being rejected. You have to have enough confidence in yourself to know that if it doesn't work out, they'll be another chance with someone else.

[Gejodi]

Not sure if organs is the right description or perhaps i am not reading your message. I read the message of perhaps your fear of rejected love or what you may have to offer?

[Elizabeth Gallegos]

I was trying to convey the message of fear of rejected love as you said. I look back at this poem and realize it is confusing. This was one of my first poems that I ever made. Looking back at it I see some areas of improvement. For example, the parts about the organs. I will eventually fix this poem and upload a new version of it. I will take your review into account and try to make the message clearer as well as changing some sentences when I do this.. Thank you for this review. If you have anymore insight or questions please comment them here.

[Gejodi]

Elizabeth..i am just like you ...learning ..I think we all are here on this site searching to find a better way to write and to communicate our message you are welcome!

[Coyote Poetry]

Hard to give our love away when we fear the ending at the beginning. I liked the thoughts shared leading to honest ending. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote