The Color of Loneliness.

I remember that moment well

when the tears felt like they were melting my skin

The letter from you: spread out in front of me on the table

Me: rereading it over and over, burning hot tears flowing

I could still hear you in my head

as I read each word

Your handwriting was so familiar that it gave me chills

But with weak hands and blurry vision, the cup I attempted to grab

knocked on its side, quick to say goodbye to the coffee inside

Before I could stop the spill

the nearly black puddle

swallowed your lines of ink in seconds

and soon

the whole paper was the color of coffee beans

Coffee beans- the color of loneliness

Coffee beans- the color of "my life is a mess"

I think it was kind of like a metaphor

for how the darkness consumed me after you were gone

just as quickly as the drink

enveloped the entirety of the paper

But I wasn't even quite sure if it was a metaphor

because quite frankly it was difficult to think about anything at all

Plus, if I pondered too hard

I'd probably convince myself it was true

And then even coffee would remind me of you

Reviews

[emipoemi]

as much as I felt the power and brilliance of this poem, I have to say, it wasn't clear what the letter actually is (a break-up letter, a suicide note, the last letter received before a break up). Also, from "not being quite sure of it being a metaphor" until "being convinced of it being true" takes away from the poem's draw and depth. Simply after "enveloped the entirety of the paper" put something like "Perhaps even coffee would remind me of you". Other than that, this is a great piece. Kind of eponymic, no? Well done!

[Shivalik Kalsotra]

very well penned, feelings well expressed and touched my heart...writing style is great...nice work I love it

[mess of gorgeous chaos]

Much appreciated! :)