Just Wait

A few months ago i was faced with a decision that would change my life forever. This is to my soulmate, Hallows! You are so amazing, and time will only tell of our epic . Here is to us!

 

 

 

 

 

Days are colder

yet life still waits

for the sun to caress

its sleeping place.

The longing, so strong

you can hear the earth murmur

..."just wait".

As the wind chills all around

our seed is nestled deep in the ground.

 

 

Reviews

[Athena Manolopoulos]

This is beautiful! Short, yet understandable and to the point. It conveys a specific emotion and I like that. The only thing that I might say to change would be to eliminate the word "deep" from the last sentence so it doesn't read that extra beat longer than the other sentences. I do understand why you would keep it in there though.

[The Musings of Mary H.]

Altogether a wonderful poem! The waiting game is so harsh...and cold. Great use of words!

Mary

[WhoaitSarah]

wow, alot of emotion.
Very good.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

You express such deep emotions in such a short piece... that longing to be with your true love can make time sem so slow but deep in our heart we know it is worth the wait as i myself will soon be with mine... beautiful work.

[Robert Luna]

I like this and the feeling of a deeper understanding it leaves me with. I love to see piece like this where it leaves me feeling something and pondering a bit myself about the words and the message of belief and hope that reins so intertwined into the words themselves. Very strong and passionate piece with out overkill allowing us the reader to feel your words and not have them just shoved into our face.


Great Job!!!!

[Tania Leigh]

I love short writes when they convey so much.....this is great....the nestled seed is an excellent metaphor for a future relationship with great promise. I also love the contrast of cold and warmth here.
Very nice work!

[Nicholas Hallows]

"I bet Hallows is thrilled" - Yes he is. x

[Brenda Sue]

Very beautiful. Great job.

[Genie]

I love the mystery and the possibilities that are both tangible and intangible here, what's said and unsaid! Glad to know someone else hears the murmur of the earth :-).

Well done -- my kind of poem!

[TamiViolet]

How stunning this piece is ELii... Personification and imagery are creative and paint a
lovely canvas. I bet Hallows is thrilled :-)

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