IF I WERE LOVE

 

If I were love, you would never feel alone. 
Every man would see you as a queen and offer up his throne. 

If I were love, hurtful tears would never flow from your eyes. 
I would fill your soul with gladness so only joyful tears could slip by. 

If I were love, everything under Heaven you would possess. 
The world would give you everything and flock to your every requests. 

If I were loves personification,  I would ultimately have to become flesh. 
Just so I could hold you and let you feel true love at its best.  

© 2013 Eddie Phillips

Reviews

[s y e]

// If I were love you would never feel alone
Every man would see you as a queen and offer up his throne //

This is so good. I wish every guy felt like this. I think couples would be so much happier and actually last a while. ;-) Only thing I would say it add some punctuation.

[Eddie Phillips]

I know I am bad with punctuation sometimes. I just write ti out and let it go. I will do some editing soon. Its hard to focus on it with my schedule overseas. THanks for reading.

[s y e]

I suck at punctuation but I try my best. :P

[Clara]

Wonderful, beautiful and celebratory too. :)

[KaylasPoetryBook]

Sweet, simple, and sincere. I enjoyed it. :)

[Rita L. Sev]

Now THAT'S how romance is done - a beautiful piece, your heart shines through here, Eddie.

[Saddam]

Beautiful play with words and emotion. Great skill..
Lovely art you have created.

[Butch Decatoria]

If I we're love I would tell you this is a well written poem, bravo

[Eddie Phillips]

Thank you, I am glad you liked it.

[Tarry Franck]

OMG - this is beautiful - such love for this poem. I'm in awe!

[Eddie Phillips]

Thank you for taking the time to connect with this poem Tarry. I am glad you liked it.

[Tarry Franck]

My pleasure

[Kwiksie Ifediora]

wonderful rhyme to very sweet words.
i enjoyed this. :)

[Eddie Phillips]

Thank you for for reading it. I wanted it to be short and sweet.

[NebraskaHope]

I love the rhythm of the poem it was great to read.

[Eddie Phillips]

Thank you, I wanted to flow well and tell a simple story. I am glad you liked it.

[Grey]

I liked it. Needs a few commas, but other than that it was quite beautiful.

[Eddie Phillips]

I agree but it was a spin off my pen poem. I will edit it later. I write like that. I write post and then edit much later after people give me their opinions and comments. Thanks for reading. :)