THE LONELY B***H!

A truthful poem about a woman that complains just to complain. I know men do it too! LOL

 

 

Girl you're always trippin!

Always fighting, always Bitchin!

Every minute of every day

Mad when you don't get your way,

 

On any given day

Never three kind words you say

Even though I work hard to make my pay

you seem to always find a way;

 

To push me over!

Knock me down!

Always a barb!

Always a frown!

 

You b***h about your clothes, our cars, your ring, YOUR NOSE!

Girl you trip on everything.

Its just sad, self centered, and mean!

It's sad that everything we posses,

ultimately equates to you as mess!

 

I don't know how much more I can take

You seem happy with your fate

to criticize, mourn, and scorn

so that all I can do is warn

That if you continue down this path

of ignorant self-centered wraith

I will leave you all alone

a bitter queen by an empty throne

With no king beside to sit;

because sweetie no King wants a B***H!

 

© 2012 Eddie Phillips

Author's Note

This poem is not insulting. In fact it never actually calls anyone a Bitch. It is told from a male perspective. I tried to attack it from a fed up P.O.V. the man is just tired and wants his love to know that he is tired and she needs to reflect on what she is doing. I had to make this unequivocally clear so that no one got the false interpretation that I am calling a woman a Bitch.

Reviews

[Glen Yumang Manese]

I stumbled in a couple areas in the lines, but minor:

ultimately equates to you as mess!
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ultimately equates to you as a mess!

Did you want to use wraith here instead of wrath??? --- an apparition...or something shadowy and insubstantial.
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of ignorant self-centered wraith

The language is straight forward as a reader of this...and the struggle of getting through to the other person of interest in the lines...the give and take is definitely out the window in the verse...yet the venting moment is secure in the piece...

[Eddie Phillips]

I wrote this poem about a year and a half ago on my phone. I have not edited anything on it but I will take your review and look at it again. LOL Don't take this poem too seriously. It is just a thought. Thanks for the review!

[Glen Yumang Manese]

I review as I do with all of them...of course...I understand what you are saying...you're welcome...

[Eddie Phillips]

I really appreciate it! Thanks for stopping by!

[Constance Payne]

Well, from a woman's point of view....I take B***h as a compliment. :)
Beautiful, Intelligent, Talented, Charming, and Humorous...Thanks for Noticing. :)

The woman in this poem is a Selfish Brat! and Unfortunately so many act like this.

You capture human nature quite well for such a young man. (noted by your profile picture).

Good Read.

[Eddie Phillips]

Please comment. Bad or good I would appreciate the feedback. I am new on the site.