CH. 2 Passion

  While Brandon and I were on our way to the party, we had a little conversation.

 

  "So, why did you say yes," he asked.

 

  "Well, I like you and you're fun to be around," I responded.

 

  "Well, I'm glad you said yes. I've been waiting for this opportunity."

 

  "You must really love me, huh," I teased.

 

  "Oh you tryna' play me. Oh we can't have any of that."

 

  We pulled up to Trey's house, which was huge. He lived in a gated community, Willows Peak. It's one of the biggest in Virginia. Brandon turned the car off, came around to my door, and opened it. He was so sweet. As I gracefully exited the car, Brandon whispered something in my ear. I plan on having some fun tonight

 

  I smiled nervously.

 

  "What did he mean by FUN. I hope he didn't mean sex. I didn't know he was like that....What am I doing. We JUST got here," I wondered.

 

  We walked around to the backyard. My spirit was immediately raised. There was music blasting, people were dancing, and the food smelled enticing.

 

  "Hey girl, I see you," my friend , Angelica screamed.

 

  "Hey Angel," I said.

 

  Angelica, Angel for short, has been my friend since 5th grade. She's always been there for me. She's a small person with a big heart.

 

  "You didn't tell me that you were coming with Brandon. He's scrumptious," she said.

 

  "You're crazy," I laughed,"He is though, right?"

 

  "Girl, you better claim him before I do."

 

  "I got you"

 

  Brandon smiled and led me over to the backyard swing. We both sat down and continued our conversation.

 

  "I saw what happened at the game. Why was Tanya all up in your face?"

 

  "I don't know. I guess she's jealous of how close me and Darryl are."

 

  "Well, how close are you two?"

 

  I laughed.

 

  "I didn't mean it like that. We've been friends ever since we were little. We've been their for each other. Even through our awkward stages."

 

  I started to daydream about Darryl. I've never done that before. It kind of scared me. I was soon back to normal by the calm smooth voice of Brandon.

 

  "Jade, would you like to dance," he asked.

 

  "Sure," I responded.

 

  We walked to the middle of the yard. Everyone's groove was slowed down by Robin Thicke's Sex Therapy. I wrapped my arms around his neck and he put his hands around my waste. The touch of his hands felt so right; not too loose, not too tight, but just right. I was starring at my feet until something possessed me to look up. All I could see was his beautiful hazel eyes. Brandon was so suave. He wasn't too muscular but he wasn't too skinny either. He had the cutest dimples and a smile that brightened up my day. Brandon was six feet of all man. We starred at each other for awhile. I didn't want that moment to end. Unfortunately, the song was over. I tried to unwrap my arms from around his neck but something was restraining me.

 

  The next thing I knew, Brandon kissed me. Brandon's lips were so soft.

 

  "Whew, Oh lord. You tryna start something that you can't finish," I said, catching my breath.

 

  He smiled at me and kissed me again. The passion in that kiss took over my body. Brandon pulled away slow'ly.

 

  "How was that," he asked sensually.

 

  I smiled. We walked over to the food. It was laid out over 4 tables. You could smell the food from miles away. Brandon and I made our plates and walked over to one of the many vacant party tables. Once I sat down, I glanced over at the gate leading to the backyard. I saw Darryl walk in with Tanya and her two friends. What was he doing here with her.

Reviews

[<3Lil.Bit(:]

Wow, drama is brewing. Again I agree with Dutch Jr. A little more description and a little less dialogue. Your story is headin in a great direction.

~Skulli

[Dutch Jr.]

Pretty good, and this type of story is right up my alley. Again, I think that a little detail of the atmosphere, more descriptive adjectives, and more describing of action wouldn't hurt.

Also, I feel like dialogue gobbles up too much of your chapters. Dialogue is a great way to bring your characters to life, but it shouldn't tell your story for you, tell your own, use your own voice from time to time. But I like how your story is progressing. Please, continue to write.