CH. 1 The Game

  Do you truly know what a teenager goes through? From school, to home, to relationships, to drama; It can get overwhelming. Drama has infested Duke High School.

 

  Tanya Roosevelt walks the halls of Duke as if she runs the school. She's a freshman(Go Figure).

 

  My name is Jade Sanders and I'm a Junior at DHS.

 

  A group of freshman girls were after me because of a guy. This guy has been my best friend since second grade. His name is Darryl Winston. When we were growing up, he usually looked kind of geeky. He was scrawny and wore big glasses but he was my friend until the end. Once we got into high school. He started getting muscular and taller and all the girls went after him. It was actually pretty funny. Once we became Sophomores, the real problems kicked in. Tanya started to associate with Darryl. He likes the attention so he didn't acknowledge the fact that she was using him to get her name around the school.

 

  When Darryl had his first Basketball game, Tanya and her buddies felt the need to say something to me.

 

  "Hey Jane," said Tanya.

 

  "It's Jade," I said.

 

  "Uh huh, so why you always around Darryl? It ain't like you like him."

 

  "He's my friend."

 

  "Well you look pathetic. What? You ain't got no other friends?"

 

  "Why are you over here," I asked annoyed.

 

  "I do what I want."

 

  Tanya started to get closer, but I wasn't backing down. I stood up and stood my ground.

 

  "Why don't you ask Darryl how he feels about the situation because I ain't got nothing else to say about it," I replied in rage.

 

  I sat down and continued to watch the game.

 

  "If you ever talk to me like that again, I will make sure that your a*s catch one," Tanya threatened.

 

  "Oh yea Tanya. I'm shakin' in ma boots,"

 

  Tanya and her friends walked to the other side of the gym and sat down.

 

   "What happened," he mouthed.

 

   "I'll tell you later," I mouthed back.

 

  Our school beat the Cremson High School basketball team by twenty points. I went to wait in the lobby for Darryl. While I was waiting, my friend, Brandon Jones, walked up to me.

 

  "Hey beautiful, how did you enjoy the game," he asked.

 

  I gave him a hug and replied," I'm good B. What's up," I asked.

 

  "Well I was wondering if you wanted to go to Trey's party."

 

  "Mr. Brandon, are you trying to ask me out," I asked.

 

  "Well that depends on if you're saying yes or no. So what do you say?"

 

  "Sure, I'll go with you," I smiled.

 

  "Okay cool, you wanna go now?"

 

  "Well, I just want to congratulate Darryl and then I will be right out."

 

  I walked to the boys locker room, where I found Tanya. After a few minutes, Darryl came out. Surprisingly, he walked to Tanya. After a couple seconds, he walked to me.

 

  "So in honor of my win, I think we should go to IHOP. We can go now, just you and me," he said.

 

  "I'm sorry Darryl, but Brandon asked me to go to Trey's party."

 

  "Oh....okay no problem. I guess I'll just meet you there."

 

  "That's cool. I'll see you in a few."

 

  I can tell that he was uncomfortable with me going. I met up with Brandon again in the lobby.

 

  "You ready to go," Brandon asked.

 

  I looked back at Darryl. He was talking to his coach. He happened to look up and smile at me. I smiled back.

 

  "Yeah I'm ready"

Reviews

[Dutch Jr.]

I like this; it's really something I can picture, but I still feel like you need to incorporate more detail of the environment and characters in your writing. Let your reader get to know the characters in your story, as it makes your work more believable and makes them care about your characters.

Good opening though, and you're writing a story I feel a lot of teenage girls can probably relate to. Good Job.

[<3Lil.Bit(:]

I can relate to this a lot, as Dutch Jr. said. I am best friends, and has been since kindergarden, wit the most popular guy in the school. The girls always go to me to see if I could hook them up wit him, sometimes even the guys :/ and thats when it gets kinda creepy.

I really like it and you seem to have a good storyline. I would like to know more about the characters and the surroundings though, so it wouldn't hurt if you tried to use a little more details. You have some serious talent though so I will keep on reading!

~Skulli