Ventures, №One - Stan and Frank and Rick and I: Our Venture T’wards The Clouds

Please DO NOT IGNORE the weirdness of the grammar. Inspired by various artists such as Anthony Burgess or James Joyce I am (maybe desperately) trying to twist the language itself. I should mention, that English is not my native language, so I would gladly hear any corrections on what is wrong or what is just too weird to handle.
The main idea is to mystify the reader with that "twisted" language as well as the ever rising tension with the plot constantly "slipping" away with the reader's intention to understand it, thus giving me more space to express my lyric thoughts and feelings in a seemingly epic story.