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A Poem by Egoless

A force not seen, but I feel it so deep

Like the dullest of knives it cuts into me

Torturing and tauntingly.

No one knows of the scars that it leaves

Or they choose to ignore them casually

Because beautiful girls

Should not have secrets so ugly

© 2011 Egoless


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Egoless
Opinions please! Even if its negative! I'm very open to criticism and I'm looking to better myself.

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I AM REALLY TRYING TO FIND SOMETHING TO TELL YOU SO THAT YOU CAN BETTER YOURSELF...I JUST CAN'T THINK OF ANYTHING. THIS IS SIMPLY BRILLIANT AND POWERFUL. SHORT AND SWEET. SO CREATIVE.

Posted 13 Years Ago


Great!

Short, to-the-point and an awesome effort! :D

Posted 13 Years Ago


Normally I would think there could be more to something like this. But what you have is well put together concept that comes across strong as it is. The meaning flows out and sticks into the mind of the reader and makes them think about the idea presented in the piece.

Great Ink!
Wolfie

Posted 13 Years Ago



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Added on September 30, 2011
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