Henry David's allure

I hear Thoreau

preferred women

with sea-glass

hair and eyes

deep as water

caves.  Allure

is not what is

seen but

what beckons--

 

a siren desperate to waken

the voice submered

beneath consciousness,

 

a violet pressed

between poetry

pages.  Skin

pale as ghost

coral, soft as sunset,

 

he looked all his life for allure

but like the tyme-scented mist

on his morning walk, it's damp

and barely

 

there. 

Reviews

[Clockwork]

I think your background as and English major really showed here. This is a quality piece of writing with some wonderful images, particularly about the women. I recently visited Walden Pond for the first time and found it to be a fascinating place. I was thrilled to be in the same place Thoreau conducted his living experiment.

[Whales]

This is quite whaleiful and I couldn't agree more, I completely get it too. I feel a though most people, this concept is like a foreign language, but, what a small percentage of people do see, is something that cannot be seen. This is mega and everything from F1 to F12. I hope your dreams are filled with whales.

[Melobldnfr]

I agree with invs!

[外人 (Gaiji..]

well, the only thing that comes into my mind is: great job =D

[bob, small b. aka invs]

Allure

is not what is

seen but

what beckons--

this is quite a thought. most of us think of allure as visual, but if you really stop and think about it, it's something else entirely. those to whom i'm most attracted , it's something intangible that reaches me first. the visual attraction is secondary.

[AndyJCash]

I enjoy the way you move from one concrete image to another. Such a basic concept that some people don't grasp, or if they do they lose meaning in the words, but you've got both meaning and superb description :)

[Alex Vidmar]

Love this.

[Rusty]

Wow I really like your conclusion.

[AutumnBelle]

this is so good! so lovely. great job. i again love your words and imagery {sea-glass hair, eyes deep as water caves, violet pressed between poetry pages, skin pale as ghost coral, soft as sunset...} i love this!

[MOON]

Beautiful write Allure
is not what is
seen but
what beckons--

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