Ravenous

I want to breathe in the salty air that dwells
in your soul,
                 somewhere between your
                 heart and hip-bone.

I'll let you taste the whiteness of the inside
                   of my thighs,
                   love me as words love your lips.

I yearn for what the world promises,
                what my shadow reaches for-- please!
                fill my bones with what no one else can.

Reviews

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

Sensual...I liked the feel of this one in terms of flow and meter. The offsetting of the lines gave a nice break for breath in the reading. I also quite enjoyed the imagery, while not extremely over the top, it packed a good punch and got your point across. My favorite stanza was definitely the first; it seemed to say the most to me.

[K. Louis]

I really love the first two stanzas, the yearning is felt...that second one especially what a beautiful and true image. I'm not so sure about the closing one..the exclamation point threw the tone off for me a bit. Still bold; you are a fantastic writer..one of my favorites on here..

[kumars]

this is something need to be understood form your point of view still nice draw.

[Simon Welsh]

Beautiful and yes, sensual.

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mmmm this is deeply sensual!

[Jack...]

Beautiful E. This is love, deep and penetrating, the warmth of your feelings shine through brightly in this piece.

[eglantine]

Thank you Jack

[BubblingMe]

Oh really unique! I like this type of poem