Ravenous

I want to breathe in the salty air that dwells
in your soul,
                 somewhere between your
                 heart and hip-bone.

I'll let you taste the whiteness of the inside
                   of my thighs,
                   love me as words love your lips.

I yearn for what the world promises,
                what my shadow reaches for-- please!
                fill my bones with what no one else can.

Reviews

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

Sensual...I liked the feel of this one in terms of flow and meter. The offsetting of the lines gave a nice break for breath in the reading. I also quite enjoyed the imagery, while not extremely over the top, it packed a good punch and got your point across. My favorite stanza was definitely the first; it seemed to say the most to me.

[Moving Mass]

I like how you say a lot in only a few lines. I think it's awesome.

[Ars Goetia Poetry]

Such great imagery used here :)

[Moon]

Lovely! The imagery is remarkable. Thank you for sharing :)

[Wuji]

This was splendid, I'd like you to enter it into the IVth part of the Festival (contest) I'm holding, if you don't mind. It's one of the best I've ever read of you (and that's saying a lot).

[eglantine]

Thank you!

[Cole Hayley]

Lovely title. Never read anything of yours in quite sometime! That last stanza is gorgeous.

[eglantine]

Thank you Cole! I haven't really been active in WC for the past few months... The tides have been rough in real life.

[Leigh]

Great closing line of a poem charged with the energy of desire

[Samoda]

I really really loved this poem... it grabbed me from the first words and never let me go... ' love me as words love your lips'!!!! amazing

[Leslie Philibert]

Here I agree with my fellow reviewers, a fine poem. What I like is the subtle continued imagery, from bone to whiteness then the last stanza that closes the circle. Yearn is for me slightly self consciously poetic, but all in all another great poem from a talented writer.

[Mark]

Desire and lust written so well. :)