I wrote this while waiting for you

The halite moon
is quieter than the other moons;

my eyes reflect
its salty gaze.

You talk about titanium
and teeth whitening methods
    (strawberries crushed with baking powder).

Tonight, the moon is soft,
    a snake egg left unattended
and you are red from too much whiskey.

I once stepped on a small chunk of dry
ice.  At first, nothing, then a demanding,
searing burn.     I kept walking.

You would not recognize the urgency
of misting ice;
    you are never bare-foot.

Reader, I've been where you have,
    tasted the same light.

This paper is my palm.  Press it
against your bare chest, warm it with your heartbeat.
    Together, we will whiten the moon.

Reviews

[SleeplessVolcano]

So much to be read between the lines.....from whether the gaze of the moon is in fact salty, or whether it is the eye of the beholder engulfed in tears.....due to this tormenting situation......"I kept walking", to me, refers not as much to the dry ice, but rather an attempt to walk away from this pain.

And lastly, the reader becomes a new friend. Being alone again is tough enough. At least a compassionate reader can soften the maddening blows of such melancholy.

Inspired writing!

[eglantine]

Thank you very much!
The salt bit is referring to the moon, not the speaker.

[~Beautiful Dreamer~]

This is absolutly beautiful!!

[外人 (Gaiji..]

the way you play with the reader is interesting, loved it :)

[eglantine]

Thank you ! :)

[Mark]

Small moments made magic, and a universal twist. Perhaps when we've finished whitening we can make ice cream!

[eglantine]

haha, thank you Mark

[Leslie Philibert]

Eglantine proves again and again she is a poet of enourmous talent.Love the direct address ( wasn`t it Jane Austen who used ´Reader,I married him..`?).This is full of Plathian quality, triplets packed with quality imagery. Excellent !.

[eglantine]

Thank you as always :)

[K. Louis]

love those last three lines..

[beautiful dreamer]

i love your connection with the reader. personable is always better, makes things easier to read. great work :)

[eglantine]

Thank you Jen!

[beautiful dreamer]

welcome eggplant!

[eglantine]

bwhahaha, eggplant

[beautiful dreamer]

it will forever be your nickname eggplant lol

[Simon Welsh]

Nicely written. You haven't been where I have though ;3 Love it all the same.

[eglantine]

Thank you! nice hearing from you

[Simon Welsh]

May all your days be gold.