Mute by choice

 

there are no words in my mouth

 

they are in the back of my skull,

 

near my ears;

   

    only I can hear her voice,

 

                            (our voice)

 

the voice polished with beetle-night

and grey shower steam--

   it claws and my jaw clenches, trapping it.

 

this voice does not belong

out there, in front of my lips--

 

it would tear stars from the sky.

Author's Note

In the last line: "stars from the sky" or "hearts from the sky"

Reviews

[Shmoke-Sifted Heftlande..]

this is f*****g great danielle..I like that you're so respectful of this power..and those stars might have planets with humanoids like ours, so good call..but maybe you should have a conversation with your voice and be like, yo, voice, you're pretty awesome, maybe we can peek into the light of day one of these times after exploring the sunken city in the mediterranean...you guys can have a margarita together on the beach next to some interesting greeks and/or geeks..if it gets to be too much just share a hug and an understanding glance into each other's eyes and then go for a relaxing swim..I'm sure it's pretentious of me to expand on your poem with such a tangent, but I'm just loving my neighbor as myself, even though i'm obviously not a mermaid..i'd sink like a stone in an ocean or lake like a statue...this poem really resonated and it's got your usual brilliance..i think I've probly already touched on your literary style technique accoutrements enough so i'll just finish by saying well done! bongo spazz, out!!

[eglantine]

Thank you very much :)

[Balkaran Sidhu]

amm...interesting....will be interesting if u make it a song

[Winchester Saltgunner]

its cute, ummmm... a little more emotion and adjitives would work

[I Shred This Cabbage]

best review I've ever read!

[Winchester Saltgunner]

lol thx lollzzz how???

[eglantine]

bwhahahaha John

[Winchester Saltgunner]

okayyy i just asked how it was the best was that funny some how???? "flipz hair'" i wasnt trying to be funny??? and or are yo- GGGGGRRRRR im confused!

[Fréyjä Helv..]

"stars from the sky" sounds better to me...

I love the depth of this. Left me something to think about... Love this...

[~Beautiful Dreamer~]

This made me think of me, I like it!

[Akshat♥]

"stars from the sky" or "heart from the shy" both would work perfectly :)
This write seems so perfect :)
this poem shows "our voice "...
Excellent !!
Keep writing!! :)

[eglantine]

Thank you for reading :)

[Akshat♥]

You are welcome for checking my review ..lol :D

[dukovan]

Stick with stars, it's apparent that they're in your heart

[eglantine]

Thanks for reading!

[Nick.B]

I can relate to this...sometimes it is better to let it go and just not say a thing, you know that you're right so what's the point? Great job

[eglantine]

Thank you for stopping by

[Simon Welsh]

I love that last line (both of them).

[eglantine]

Thank you toilet ;)

[Simon Welsh]

Ha x)

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