a sexual discovery

I fractured the moon and drank
its secret milk the night
I first saw my naked self
in my mother's full-length mirror:

        pale and dark-eyed,
        whispered light,
        white pinpoint pupil,
        tethered and star-bright.

Ribs are for counting,
a spine for arching
and lips for peeling
my name from your tongue.

Author's Note

libido awakened, the realization of sexual power.

Reviews

[Dana Alsamsam]

this piece hit me like a little piece of mint on my tongue! all of the senses are beautifully awakened in this one moment of powerful and almost haunting realization. the woman body is in fact a powerful thing.

the ending leaves a beautiful longing and hunger for exploration. great work!

[eglantine]

Merci! I'm glad you enjoyed it

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

I like the idea of awareness and self discovery in this piece. You have highlighted the idea of youth burgeoning into adulthood; child becoming woman and realizing what all of this is for...why we do what we do and why we are what we are. I love the last stanza..."ribs are for counting/a spine for arching"--these are great lines. Beautifully done.

[eglantine]

Thank you for reading :)

[quinfinn]

sounds like discovery and awakening combined with trepidation and delight. a blissful and engaging write.

[eglantine]

yep :) thanks for reading!

[Clockwork]

This one is so compact and sexually charged. It has a very vibrant current of electricity and awakening at its core. I like the idea of drinking the milk from the moon. On some levels, that image/concept seems like an aphrodisiac or a right of passage. The thought that follows about the full length mirror is very strong. Identity is realized in that moment, and so is the power of the female body. Although, my favorite lines from this piece are: and lips for peeling/my name from your tongue." That is truly brilliant.

[eglantine]

Thank you so much for this insightful review

[Clockwork]

You're welcome EG

[jacob erin-cilberto]

love the ending of this..there is awakening, awareness...it happens suddenly, or it seems to..we grow up...and lips for peeling your name from my tongue..what a way to say that...

exceptional write in a short span of words...two edits thought..."its'" is just "its" no apostrophe..and "mother's" singular possessive...

but such an elegant piece of writing describing a coming to terms with awakening sexuality.

[eglantine]

thank you! And I'll fix those!

[Androglossia]

The best way to find yourself is to lose yourself. There is always pleasure in discoveries. To touch or not to touch:) Well penned as always.

[Mark]

Night and the Moon are good when you're counting ribs. :)

[eglantine]

yep yep yep! Thanks

[Justaguy]

Wow. Innocently erotic. VERY nice!

[eglantine]

thanks, I tried lol