2:38 a.m.

I awoke to a piano
lullaby ringing in my ears
and moon lyrics
whitening my lips,

goosebumps illuminate my pale skin.

The stars talk
to me: they blink
Morse-code.  I drag
my knuckles along the blue
wall, force my skin away.

I want to see bright bone,
like fresh moon in the dark.

Author's Note

shed old skin, prepare for the new moon

Reviews

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

Another beautiful piece. I find depth in your writing that is not something I commonly see around here. The concrete nature of your poetry melted with the concise wording and imagery filled wordplay is a true treat. The second to last stanza is truly amazing...images I have not read before. Original indeed.

[eglantine]

thank you very much!

[koty bell]

Wonderful...awesome ..great what more can i say nice write

[eglantine]

Thank you for reading

[Rose Kavanagh]

Beautiful! Beautiful words, beautiful imagery, beautiful rhythm - just a gorgeous poem. Great work! :)

[~Beautiful Dreamer~]

I love this I know some people that need to read this!

[eglantine]

Thank you--feel free to send them a read request to this

[Androglossia]

I think you were trying gore on that "knuckles along the blue
wall" && "bright bone". Sorry babe, your poem is simply adorable:) You can't help it, can you? You never fail to make me breathless for over a year now. Great lines as always.

[eglantine]

Aw thank you! :)

[MandaBear]

Amazing write! Great job!

[bob, small b. aka invs]

laughing here because i''m running out of good things to say about your writing. just go back and read a few of my other reviews of your poems. they all apply.

[eglantine]

Haha, thank you

[Dana Alsamsam]

i very much enjoy your romantical, moon lit style of writing. i got excited reading this because i think we have sort of similar styles (although you're much more experienced than me- i am quickly beginning to look up to you!) it's beautiful and i look forward to reading more of your work!

[eglantine]

aw thanks Dana!

[CRZ]

Felt like I was there, The setting felt like 2:38 am in Australia on a Friday haha. Nice work

[eglantine]

haha, I wouldn't know, but thank you

[An owl on the moon]

You have an exquisite way of threading words like pearls, each phrase a fresh sort of whimsy. The new moon could not be as beautiful or bittersweet.

[eglantine]

Thank you Craig

[LJW]

Rarely am I immediately inspired to visit a 2nd poem of a writer whose 1st I've just read and reviewed. I am blissfully glad I did in your case.

Having now read your profile, I see your aspirations are lofty.

I would not change a word of this. Best piece I've read in a very long time.

"moon lyrics whitening my lips"
"force my skin away"
bright bone/fresh moon in the dark

One of my frustrations with many writers is their almost incessant need to employ words like azure instead of blue or ivory instead of white, scarlet instead of red. I appreciate that you did not do that here. If you did, the images would not have been as (simply) stark as you had intended. A mark of a good writer.

After reading this 2nd piece, your aspirations as expressed in your profile are attainable. Just top shelf work here. You need and deserve more reads and reviews.
100/100

[eglantine]

Wow, I am very flattered by your reviews. I can tell you know and understand the composition of poetry from your detailed review, especially the note of the simple color descriptions. Thank you very much for reading. I do appreciate it. My first book is actually being released in a week or so, if you're interested. I'll announce it on here when it does come out.

[LJW]

I have learned what I know along the way. It took 30 years for me to find a small publisher (now defunct) to publish my first book. I was determined to not go the self publishing route. I needed the validation really. I figured if someone was willing to put their $$ up at least I didn't totally suck. :-)
Yes, let me know when yours is ready.

[eglantine]

hahaha I completely agree! I see no challenge with self-publishing.

[LJW]

Yes, it would be like me writing my own review (s). I'm amused by how many writers actually call themselves "published" due to paying for their own book to be made. Huge difference. It is almost impossible to get a publishing house ( big or small) to publish poetry now. If a writer manages to accomplish that, it is a huge accomplishment indeed.

[eglantine]

Agreed! I get quite worked up about the people who call themselves writers with their self-published book(s).