I've moved to the bathtub

I've moved to the bathtub

A Poem by eglantine

Go away reader--
    I'm naked
and bathing in orange
blossoms, trying to wash
the stare of his pistachio
eyes from my skin,

you do understand, don't you?

Thorns growing inside my glass-veined heart?

If you promise not to taste
the water, you can stay,
    maybe we can listen to each others'
    pulses:
               yours dry like merlot,
               mine underwater and buoy-belled.

You know,
    he had too much hair on his back anyways.

The moon is too round in my throat
for back-hair or hard eyes.

Reader, please hold my heart for me,
    my lungs are dry;
    I need to fill them with water.

© 2013 eglantine


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E, the line, "You know, he had too much hair on his back anyways" had me laughing out loud this morning. I know what you are saying in this piece. I understand the emotions that are pouring from this screen and I also realize, it is not funnt...this feeling. But the fact that you found a spot to insert a little humor made this poem extra great. Very cool my friend. I agree with Sarah, you have a very unique style about you.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

eglantine

11 Years Ago

Thank you very much Jack and glad to have had you laugh.



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“My lungs are dry- I need to fill them With water” yikes. Such a strong line. And the fact that the writer is giving her heart to the reader makes it appear that this is her last request before heartbreak and (drowning) send the writer to her death...

Posted 5 Years Ago


yes, oh yes, is there room in the tub for me?

Posted 11 Years Ago


I'm glad I came across this on the home page, E. Enjoyed it immensely as it was very well written, with a little humor that balanced it out nicely. Will definitely be reading more of your work, as you clearly have a unique style all your own. Well done.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

eglantine

11 Years Ago

Thank you :)
E, the line, "You know, he had too much hair on his back anyways" had me laughing out loud this morning. I know what you are saying in this piece. I understand the emotions that are pouring from this screen and I also realize, it is not funnt...this feeling. But the fact that you found a spot to insert a little humor made this poem extra great. Very cool my friend. I agree with Sarah, you have a very unique style about you.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

eglantine

11 Years Ago

Thank you very much Jack and glad to have had you laugh.
I agree . You have a real comfortability about your writing and just all I can say is you're great at what yo do and I feel inferior and stupid now..
I really loved it


Posted 11 Years Ago


eglantine

11 Years Ago

no! don't feel inferior and stupid! Thanks for reading
Richard

11 Years Ago

But I ... inevitably ... I have no choice is what I mean!
:) I feel stupid inside ... no I don.. read more
I can definately say I've never read anything like that. Very vivid yet blunt descriptions. It sort reminds me of a Lydia song. I could hear the fellow sing these words. I'm definately a fan.

Posted 11 Years Ago


eglantine

11 Years Ago

merci :)
What an interestingly surreal and out of the box piece. I am reminded a little of Sylvia Plath...sort of the purposefully contrary voice off-set by the eventual longing for connection to the reader. Obviously, the imagery and the wording are both great; you have a very unusual style all of your own. Well written.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

eglantine

11 Years Ago

That makes me so happy that you picked up on Plath's influence in my writing. She is my inner-mento.. read more
Girl Friday (Sarah W.)

11 Years Ago

One of mine as well...she had a morbidly fascinating voice, and life as well, I suppose. While in c.. read more
eglantine

11 Years Ago

haha YES! I did as well! Have you read her journal entries?
Wow. Nice soliloquy!

I love your motifs ("...the moon is too round in my throat...")! And as always, your descriptives: "orange blossoms"; "pistachio eyes".

And, "you do understand, don't you?" Just treasures, them all, as are you!

Posted 11 Years Ago


eglantine

11 Years Ago

Thank you for reading and commenting--I appreciate it!
i have no idea what to say here girl!! good poem

Posted 11 Years Ago


eglantine

11 Years Ago

haha *hug
I got a taste of your blissful writing after a long time eglantine, and it tastes as beautiful as before.
The moon is too round in my throat
for back hair or hard eyes-
One of the beautiful highlights of this piece.
Loved it absolutely:):):D.

Posted 11 Years Ago


eglantine

11 Years Ago

merci :)

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