Honey and milk bath
A Poem by
eglantine
... seaglass breath,
lullabyes and bubbles.
I write hallelujah on my skin,
where your lips used to murmur my name.
one by one, mermaids
fall from my eyes--
they taste of salt.
I slip underwater to listen--
to check
that my heart still beats.
© 2013 eglantine
Featured Review
amazing write...
"mermaids fall from my eyes"
really love that line.. checking that my heart still beats...
alone in a bath of bubbles, reminiscing...of a love that used to be...and a wondering by the speaker. "am i still alive?"
good stuff here.
jacob
Posted 11 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
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hallelujah, oh how i need this
Posted 11 Years Ago
hallelujah, oh how i need this
Wow this is amazing, good job
Posted 11 Years Ago
Wow this is amazing, good job
remind me not to let read requests build up so that i have to review half dozen of your poems at once. it's too much.
this is beautiful, amazing stuff.
Posted 11 Years Ago
remind me not to let read requests build up so that i have to review half dozen of your poems at once. it's too much.
this is beautiful, amazing stuff.
amazing write...
"mermaids fall from my eyes"
really love that line.. checking that my heart still beats...
alone in a bath of bubbles, reminiscing...of a love that used to be...and a wondering by the speaker. "am i still alive?"
good stuff here.
jacob
Posted 11 Years Ago
amazing write...
"mermaids fall from my eyes"
really love that line.. checking that my heart still beats...
alone in a bath of bubbles, reminiscing...of a love that used to be...and a wondering by the speaker. "am i still alive?"
good stuff here.
jacob
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
I missed this one before, but I'm glad I came back to give it a look. The second stanza is amazing, and I think its my favorite overall. Also, I liked the way you described tears without mentioning that's what they were. I've never though of a tear as a mermaid until I read you, but I think that is beautiful and fitting.
Posted 11 Years Ago
I missed this one before, but I'm glad I came back to give it a look. The second stanza is amazing, and I think its my favorite overall. Also, I liked the way you described tears without mentioning that's what they were. I've never though of a tear as a mermaid until I read you, but I think that is beautiful and fitting.
11 Years Ago
glad that image worked! Wasn't sure at first
none of this is nonsense, it is pure, unadulterated metaphorical magnificence....well penned!
Posted 11 Years Ago
none of this is nonsense, it is pure, unadulterated metaphorical magnificence....well penned!
11 Years Ago
Thank you Quin!
mermaid is such a fabled noun, with the upper body of a beautiful woman and the tail of a fish,
that when introduced poetically suggest a festive innocence. Using them as taste and tears is
an exciting metaphor...and masterfully done.
you write such tender poetry.
dana
Posted 11 Years Ago
mermaid is such a fabled noun, with the upper body of a beautiful woman and the tail of a fish,
that when introduced poetically suggest a festive innocence. Using them as taste and tears is
an exciting metaphor...and masterfully done.
you write such tender poetry.
dana
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
11 Years Ago
Thank you, mermaids are dear to me
I love it. Very tender and elegant.
Posted 11 Years Ago
I love it. Very tender and elegant.
beautiful. i love your imagery
Posted 11 Years Ago
beautiful. i love your imagery
one by one, mermaids
fall from my eyes-
they taste of salt.
you truly are a mermaid eglantine, one who writes mesmerizing pieces. The imagery in this one was beautiful, and I loved it:):):D.
Posted 11 Years Ago
one by one, mermaids
fall from my eyes-
they taste of salt.
you truly are a mermaid eglantine, one who writes mesmerizing pieces. The imagery in this one was beautiful, and I loved it:):):D.
11 Years Ago
:) yes, I am a mermaid
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I graduated with my B.A. in English (emphasis creative writing) My ultimate goal is to be the U.S. Poet Laureate and to be a college professor of poetry. I'm a wildflower with a poetic soul. I'm als..
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