Honey and milk bath

Honey and milk bath

A Poem by eglantine

... seaglass breath,

lullabyes and bubbles.

I write hallelujah on my skin,
where your lips used to murmur my name.

one by one, mermaids
fall from my eyes--
    they taste of salt.

I slip underwater to listen--
                         to check
that my heart still beats.

© 2013 eglantine


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amazing write...

"mermaids fall from my eyes"

really love that line.. checking that my heart still beats...

alone in a bath of bubbles, reminiscing...of a love that used to be...and a wondering by the speaker. "am i still alive?"

good stuff here.

jacob

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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hallelujah, oh how i need this

Posted 11 Years Ago


Wow this is amazing, good job

Posted 11 Years Ago


remind me not to let read requests build up so that i have to review half dozen of your poems at once. it's too much.

this is beautiful, amazing stuff.

Posted 11 Years Ago


amazing write...

"mermaids fall from my eyes"

really love that line.. checking that my heart still beats...

alone in a bath of bubbles, reminiscing...of a love that used to be...and a wondering by the speaker. "am i still alive?"

good stuff here.

jacob

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I missed this one before, but I'm glad I came back to give it a look. The second stanza is amazing, and I think its my favorite overall. Also, I liked the way you described tears without mentioning that's what they were. I've never though of a tear as a mermaid until I read you, but I think that is beautiful and fitting.

Posted 11 Years Ago


eglantine

11 Years Ago

glad that image worked! Wasn't sure at first
none of this is nonsense, it is pure, unadulterated metaphorical magnificence....well penned!

Posted 11 Years Ago


eglantine

11 Years Ago

Thank you Quin!
mermaid is such a fabled noun, with the upper body of a beautiful woman and the tail of a fish,
that when introduced poetically suggest a festive innocence. Using them as taste and tears is
an exciting metaphor...and masterfully done.

you write such tender poetry.
dana

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

eglantine

11 Years Ago

Thank you, mermaids are dear to me
I love it. Very tender and elegant.

Posted 11 Years Ago


eglantine

11 Years Ago

merci
beautiful. i love your imagery

Posted 11 Years Ago


eglantine

11 Years Ago

danke!
beautiful dreamer

11 Years Ago

welcome
one by one, mermaids
fall from my eyes-
they taste of salt.
you truly are a mermaid eglantine, one who writes mesmerizing pieces. The imagery in this one was beautiful, and I loved it:):):D.

Posted 11 Years Ago


eglantine

11 Years Ago

:) yes, I am a mermaid

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