Summer's end lake

The sun is almost empty.
The last of its honey-light
slowly drips into the linear crack
in-between lake and sky.

The embers in my heart
that keep me alive
are fading from the cold
air I breathe in

as I stand on a grass-stubbled
sand dune, watching
the sun dry out and the lake
wrestle with its grey self,
           spewing angry white froth.

The wind is so sharp
if you were to shout secrets in my ear
I couldn't keep them--
           sand fills the air instead.

Reviews

[lost girl]

a definite sandstorm! So many great lines in this...wrestle with its grey self...the sun is almost empty...slowly drips into the linear cracks... I can feel the grit on my face, the dryness in my thoughts, the burden of heavy on my shoulders....magnificent write dear MAGNIFICENT!

[eglantine]

thank you very much :)

[Allycat]

"The embers in my heart
that keep me alive
are fading from the cold
air I breathe in"
This is absolutely beautiful
brilliant write, as always
thank you for sharing!

[eglantine]

thank ya

[Aaron]

"The wind is so sharp
if you were to shout secrets in my ear
I couldn't keep them--
sand fills the air instead."
There is something deeply good about that. It's a fascinating image, maybe. Maybe it just makes me feel good.

I can't say I "get" the poem otherwise. My natural flow of reading doesn't seem to work well for this poem.

I like the images. I think I just said that about your writing before so I won't elaborate.

Thanks for sharing.

[eglantine]

thanks for reading :) I appreciate it

[quinfinn]

being a Cancer, i love anything to do with the water (crab-water sign) i have to tell you that this poem is no disappointment. in fact...it sings. never thought to imagine a body of water wrestling with itself...astute and picturesque...love it!
i am also a leo on the cusp so that means that i am a water sign and an earth sign which, if you do the math, makes me a mud sign. just my rotten luck! great write!!!

[eglantine]

hahah nice, im a leo but lions like to swim too! :)