"Forever Hollow" explores the loss of childhood innocence and the anxiety that comes with growing up, reflecting on fading memories and the emptiness they leave behind.
Somedayeverythingwilldriftaway
Except for the anxietythatwillhit
The momentwhenyou’llfeelasif
Youtoohavevanishedoffthisearthlysphere
The fear for the monsterunder the bed
Youwouldlook for itshead
Neededmama’shelpinghand
Gone, likegrains of sand
SantaClaus, the Christmasgent
Thatmiracle, gifts and joy
Pullingall-nighterstocatchthatman
Ruinedallbythe voice of a youngschoolboy
Asyouand yoursiblingsplead for justonemoregame
Yourealiseitistimetosaygoodbye for a while
Toall the joyfulmemoriesyouclaimed
Becausenowtheysliptoliveswhereyoudon’tshare the samemile
CelebratingEasterwithyourfamily
Eatinguntilyoureachgratification
Butnoweachglanceweighsheavily
And the celebrationnowcomeswitha side of calculation
the theme explored in this verse was multi-layered and dynamic. it makes us feel a spectrum of emotion but also makes us think. from the first stanza, we learn the persona is suffering from a depression. what is at the root of this affliction seems to be an uneasy relationship with her family. this is a very heavy problem, one i know about all too well.
then we get a flashback of a simpler time. childhood, an age of innocence, everything seemed so much easier. how one wishes to regain that joy. yet it has been snatched away from our heroine. and now these memories seem to mock her. instead of nostalgia, there is envy.
i relate really hard to this work. and it was written boldly and beautifully. it's a rollercoaster of emotions and a parade of ideas.
Posted 1 Month Ago
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1 Month Ago
Absolutely!! Everything you said is absolutely correct! I relate to this poem a lot, the only part t.. read moreAbsolutely!! Everything you said is absolutely correct! I relate to this poem a lot, the only part that hasn't happened to me yet is with siblings moving out of our home. But I will relate to that too soon because my only sister is about to become 18 so she will leave and I will miss her, I already do even though she is home! Thank you so much for your review, I appreciate it a lot!
Your poem also shows all we did in the past (Most likely). Like in the second paragraph you wrote that you have the fear of monsters. We would also wait for Santa, not knowing he's not real. And also celebrate easter (Although I don't). Once again, this is a beautiful write. Keep going!
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Yes exactly! These are common things we did which is why I decided to include them in the poem! I st.. read moreYes exactly! These are common things we did which is why I decided to include them in the poem! I still celebrate Easter, that part of the poem actually has a darker meaning, but it's okay, everyone understands poems in their own way and that's the beauty of it! :D
3 Days Ago
I get it. In my area, people do celebrate other country's celebration, but India's more. (Eg. Holi, .. read moreI get it. In my area, people do celebrate other country's celebration, but India's more. (Eg. Holi, Diwali, etc.) That's why I don't really celebrate Easter.
I agree! Maybe next time I will start celebrating easter.
3 Days Ago
You can do anything you want of course! I believe in Jesus Christ so I celebrate Easter, Christmas a.. read moreYou can do anything you want of course! I believe in Jesus Christ so I celebrate Easter, Christmas and many more holidays!
Your poem beautifully captures the transition from childhood fun to adulthood, times when life takes a drastic turn. The mix of nostalgia, loss, and the haunting presence of anxiety, perfect. A terror you want to forget, need to forget, but can't. A time when your heart beats more than ever. All from, nostalgia? Is that possible? Yes... As a child you are free. Adult? Busy, can't play, not free. Just stressed. Childhood is not just a life of a kid, it's memories. Its gold. It's everything. You really just want to be a child again at this point. You can't take it anymore. Lovely write, my friend.
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Thank you so much for your review Martiya! Everything you said is true yes! Thank you for understand.. read moreThank you so much for your review Martiya! Everything you said is true yes! Thank you for understanding my poem so well friend!
the theme explored in this verse was multi-layered and dynamic. it makes us feel a spectrum of emotion but also makes us think. from the first stanza, we learn the persona is suffering from a depression. what is at the root of this affliction seems to be an uneasy relationship with her family. this is a very heavy problem, one i know about all too well.
then we get a flashback of a simpler time. childhood, an age of innocence, everything seemed so much easier. how one wishes to regain that joy. yet it has been snatched away from our heroine. and now these memories seem to mock her. instead of nostalgia, there is envy.
i relate really hard to this work. and it was written boldly and beautifully. it's a rollercoaster of emotions and a parade of ideas.
Posted 1 Month Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
1 Month Ago
Absolutely!! Everything you said is absolutely correct! I relate to this poem a lot, the only part t.. read moreAbsolutely!! Everything you said is absolutely correct! I relate to this poem a lot, the only part that hasn't happened to me yet is with siblings moving out of our home. But I will relate to that too soon because my only sister is about to become 18 so she will leave and I will miss her, I already do even though she is home! Thank you so much for your review, I appreciate it a lot!
This captures well, the topic in your description. It can indeed, be hard to fill that void, sometimes; losing childhood's innocence and magic.
I noticed that you have linked some verses, with two different seasons; in the context of your childhood memories and feelings over growing up.
Of course, adults soon find new anxieties; whatever age they happen to be. And, I expect that many people could relate to the main topic of this poem.
In your profile, it mentions that you're 14; so certainly no mere child. And, it would be good to share more of your thoughts and feelings; in words through further poems.
Yes that was exactly the message I was trying to "send" through this poem! Long story short that all.. read moreYes that was exactly the message I was trying to "send" through this poem! Long story short that all of the unforgettable memories and happy moments fade away as a person grows up. I am glad you understood the meaning of this poem!
Yes I am 14 (I am currently 13 but my birthday is in 10 days) Thank you so much for the advice I will make sure to write more poems that incorporate my feelings!